Dear Mr. Hammond,
I am writing to inform you that i would like to work at the Head Office in Spain, which has a recent opening for the post of Assistant Team Lead, at Security Management department, for a period of 6 months.The opening was published in the company's current magazine and would like to take on the challenge.
The main reason why i would love to work at the Head Office is because i just got an offer to study a certificate program in System Security, at the University of Spain, the course is for a period of 4 months. This course will really help my productivity at work as that is my job role currently.Secondly, working at the Head Office will afford me the opportunity to work with new colleagues and understand Spanish culture better.
However, I have already discussed with my colleague, Catherine and she has agreed to take up my job for that period as we both double as System Security Officers.
In this view, I am soliciting your assistance concerning this issue and kindly recommend me for the post as this is a very rare opportunity for me to prove my mettle and I promise to put in my best.
Yours faithfully,
Oluwunmi Bajo,
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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.... Yours faithfully, Oluwunmi Bajo,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, really, second, secondly, so
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.48453608247 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 4.92783505155 101% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 5.05154639175 99% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 3.03092783505 132% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 32.9175257732 85% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 26.3917525773 117% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.85567010309 78% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 965.0 937.175257732 103% => OK
No of words: 209.0 206.0 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61722488038 4.54256449028 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.80221413058 3.78020617076 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84382046741 2.54303337028 112% => OK
Unique words: 117.0 127.690721649 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.55980861244 0.622605031667 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 307.8 290.88556701 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.41237113402 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.13402061856 55% => OK
Article: 3.0 0.824742268041 364% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 1.83505154639 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.463917525773 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 1.44329896907 208% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 6.0 12.6804123711 47% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 34.0 16.3608247423 208% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.1731138787 44.8134815571 192% => OK
Chars per sentence: 160.833333333 76.5299724578 210% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 34.8333333333 16.8248392259 207% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 4.34317383033 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.29896907216 93% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 2.54639175258 236% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 7.41237113402 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.49484536082 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 3.94845360825 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262251284328 0.216113520407 121% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.12667824668 0.0766984524023 165% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061304388002 0.0603063233224 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.134472831141 0.12726935374 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0824308230604 0.0580467560999 142% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.7 8.37731958763 211% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 45.43 70.7449484536 64% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 3.82989690722 292% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 7.45979381443 206% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 10.11 8.71597938144 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 7.59969072165 113% => OK
difficult_words: 43.0 41.2886597938 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 28.0 8.62886597938 324% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 15.6 8.54432989691 183% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 8.15463917526 196% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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