Being limited by the economy, we used to live within a big family in the past. The collective living style has several advantages, such as, saving the living cost, gathering the labor forces and so on. So it is essential for our last generation to make all the benefits by the extended family with all the relatives to maintain the life. But these days, the background of our society is changed, the importance of the extended family is completely declined.
The economy have developed rapidly in modern society. Nowadays, we no need to live collectively to maintain a basic life. The young generation shift into big cities to seek more opportunities or make use of the facilities equipped by cities. Obviously they no longer lived together as the physical area is changed. In this case, the benefits of the original extended family brings are no longer efficient.
Even when the new generation stays in their hometown, the negative affect of the big extended family is increasing. The payments cannot always gain the precise rewards which will easily lead to conflicts between the relatives. Many examples around me showed relatives quarreled on the inherent rights and obligations of taking care of the old ones.
Last but not the least, the values of organizing a family vary from generations to generations, individuals to individuals. With a relative free environment, several person choice living in single state rather than in the relationship of marriage. This kind of phenomenon also implies that the extended family does not play an important role nowadays as it does before.
- TOEFL T P O 49 - Integrated Writing Task 3
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Playing computer games is a waste of time. Children should not be allowed to play them. 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In twenty years there will be fewer cars in use than there are today.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 70
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 66
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The extended family (grandparents, cousins, aunts, and uncles) is less important now than it was in the past.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 66
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, so, kind of, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 13.0 43.0788530466 30% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1335.0 1977.66487455 68% => OK
No of words: 262.0 407.700716846 64% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09541984733 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.02323427807 4.48103885553 90% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77704478542 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 212.727598566 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.62213740458 0.524837075471 119% => OK
syllable_count: 438.3 618.680645161 71% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 24.5679104163 48.9658058833 50% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.0 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.4666666667 20.6045352989 85% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.33333333333 5.45110844103 43% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11774226539 0.236089414692 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0373560090122 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0347031013774 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0698635543649 0.150856017488 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0327930242231 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.76 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.0 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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