Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, both Internet access and public transportation are closely associated with people daily life. Internet offer us a way to a broader virtual world, in contrast, public transportation facilitate us to arrive the real destination. In the meantime, whether governments should invest more in Internet access or in public transportation has loomed up wide public concern. From my perspective, I would rather prefer to consider improving public transportation more worthy, rather than boosting Internet access.
Firstly, comparatively speaking, it is more imperative to enhance the public transportation, as the environment problems, such as haze, get increasingly serious. To a large extent, the main contributor of haze is the exhaust fume from automobiles and vehicles. By offering more comfortable and convenient public transportation, people would reduce the use of private cars and turn to subway or buses, which is conducive to relieve our environmental problems. Only when the living environment becomes more pleasant, people's health and living conditions can get enhanced, thus, they could better enjoy the benefits of Internet. Under these circumstances, it is a wiser choice for the political authorities to allocate more money in improving public transportation.
Secondly, providing quicker and more convenient transportation to workers means less commuting time, which is not only beneficial to increase social efficiency, but also reduce the complaints from employees. Therefore, it is a good way to boost modern citizens' sense of happiness. Take my cousin's experience as an example, she works in a big company which locates in Shanghai's center area. However, as the skyrocketing price of house, she has to rent an apartment in the suburban area. Every day, she has to get up at 5 in order to arrive at her working place before 9 because it takes her 3 hours on the subway. In addition, as the subway is always piled with crowded people, it is infrequent to find an available seat. Therefore, when she gets the company, tired and exhausted, she has less energy to support an efficient work. In this sense, a better transportation would help to improve workers' mood and guarantee the social efficiency; hence, it is more advantageous to invest more money to improve public transportation than Internet access.
Some people may argue that a better Internet access contributes to enrich people's life, as people could use internet to watch movies, play computer games. However, not everyone spends time on computers, for example, an 80-year-old man may even don't know how to use the computer. Therefore, the benefits of public transportation would exert more widespread impact on people than internet access does. It is more important for governments to spend money to improve Internet access than to improve public transportation.
To conclude, chaining together all the merits elaborated above, I am completely convinced that it is superior to allocate money in enhancing public transportation then internet access.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, as to, for example, in addition, in contrast, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 8.0752688172 248% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2596.0 1977.66487455 131% => OK
No of words: 473.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.48837209302 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.66353547975 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.15138813517 2.67179642975 118% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.53488372093 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 808.2 618.680645161 131% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.5931075536 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.0 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.81818181818 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.306416859886 0.236089414692 130% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.100382179753 0.076458572812 131% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.128680910346 0.0737576698707 174% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178554828638 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0772950212794 0.0645574589148 120% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.2 11.7677419355 129% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.56 10.9000537634 134% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.01818996416 111% => OK
difficult_words: 127.0 86.8835125448 146% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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