The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Submitted by AydaShah on Sat, 06/01/2019 - 06:37

The plans depict grange park in 1920 when it opened and the same park today.

Firstly, there was a big fountain in the center of the park in 1920. Next to the fountain, on the left, there was a stage that musicians could perform there. According to the old plan, the park had three rose gardens in the north-west, south-west, and the north-east. Furthermore, people could sit on the seats that situated next to each garden and in the south-east beside the glass house. There was an infrastructure for water plans in the north-east beside a rose garden.

In following, two of the rose gardens were demolished and there is just one in the north-west. Although, a big rose garden is constructed in the center of the park where there was a fountain in 1920. This central rose garden is surrounded by seats. The musician's stage is developed to an amphitheater for concerts. Also, there is an area for children's play in the north-east where there was a pond for water plans in 1920 and a cafe is constructed on its left. In addition to the previous northern and southern entrances, a new entrance from the underground car park is built that it is on the right of the new water feature.

To sum up, the grange park had huge changes from 1920. Now it has many facilities for adults and children.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 96, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...nd there is just one in the north-west. Although, a big rose garden is constructed in th...
^^^^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, furthermore, so, in addition, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 7.0 200% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 1.00243902439 200% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 6.8 103% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 3.15609756098 190% => OK
Pronoun: 8.0 5.60731707317 143% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 32.0 33.7804878049 95% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1065.0 965.302439024 110% => OK
No of words: 232.0 196.424390244 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.59051724138 4.92477711251 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.90276135726 3.73543355544 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64872355568 2.65546596893 100% => OK
Unique words: 110.0 106.607317073 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.474137931034 0.547539520022 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 307.8 283.868780488 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 8.94146341463 157% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.8361146271 43.030603864 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.0714285714 112.824112599 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5714285714 22.9334400587 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.35714285714 5.23603664747 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 1.69756097561 59% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.09268292683 293% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.181434058038 0.215688989381 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0760061148507 0.103423049105 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.112247433569 0.0843802449381 133% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176323751938 0.15604864568 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.150290585159 0.0819641961636 183% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.5 13.2329268293 64% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 80.62 61.2550243902 132% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 6.0 10.3012195122 58% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 9.05 11.4140731707 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.22 8.06136585366 90% => OK
difficult_words: 41.0 40.7170731707 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 11.4329268293 66% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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