The following appeared in a memo from the director of student housing at Buckingham College.
"To serve the housing needs of our students, Buckingham College should build a number of
new dormitories. Buckingham's enrollment is growing and, based on current trends, will double
over the next 50 years, thus making existing dormitory space inadequate. Moreover, the
average rent for an apartment in our town has risen in recent years. Consequently, students will
find it increasingly difficult to afford off-campus housing. Finally, attractive new dormitories would
make prospective students more likely to enroll at Buckingham."
Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the
argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.
In this memo, the director of student housing at Buckingham College is suggesting to
increase the number of dormitories based on claims that she has assumed. But she fails to
provide any hard evidence to support the claim. There are some unstated assumptions which
she made to prove her arguments.
Firstly, author makes an assumption that the rate of enrollment of new students will not
decrease in the future. Suppose, for some reasons the new students are likely to be enrolled in
other colleges than this one.That may happen that in future the number of new student will not
increase at all. So claim of the author that in next 50 years, number of new student will be
doubled, is solely based assumption on current trends.
In addition, the current occupancies of dormitories is not mentioned. There could be
some empty dormitories are available. Even it is possible that there are very few students who
are living in the dormitories. These vacant dormitories may accommodate enough students who
are newly enrolled. So there would be no need to build new dormitories.
Furthermore, the author is claiming that the average rent for an apartment in her town
has risen which will cause more students to prefer living in dormitories over the apartments. In
this claim author is assuming that the rate of average rent of an apartment will keep rising. In
the real estate there are highs and lows. No one can really predict the rent for the future. There
may be possible that, after some years it would more cheap to live in an apartment rather than
in a dormitory. Also sharing of an apartment among people can make the rent affordable.
By examining all the aspects for the author’s suggestion about increasing the number of
dormitories, is flawed and weak without hard evidences. Arguments made by the author does
not endorse the need of building new dormitories. So the author needs more evidence to
support her suggestion
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Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: ??? out of 6
Category: Poor Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 329 350
No. of Characters: 1564 1500
No. of Different Words: 154 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.259 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.754 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.543 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 107 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 78 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 56 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 34 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.45 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.413 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.31 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.557 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.132 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 8, column 30, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: That
...rolled in other colleges than this one.That may happen that in future the number of...
^^^^
Line 22, column 17, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Also,
... apartment rather than in a dormitory. Also sharing of an apartment among people ca...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, may, really, so, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 19.6327345309 97% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 11.1786427146 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 46.0 55.5748502994 83% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 16.3942115768 73% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1650.0 2260.96107784 73% => OK
No of words: 328.0 441.139720559 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.03048780488 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25567506705 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69066926076 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 158.0 204.123752495 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.481707317073 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 508.5 705.55239521 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.70958083832 37% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.22255489022 166% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.93786208 57.8364921388 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.5 119.503703932 69% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.4 23.324526521 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.4 5.70786347227 60% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 23.0 5.15768463074 446% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.25449101796 38% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.67664670659 150% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148200295068 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0461924650318 0.0743258471296 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0753888934928 0.0701772020484 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0477551199495 0.128457276422 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0814109184158 0.0628817314937 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.5 14.3799401198 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 48.3550499002 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 12.197005988 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.6 12.5979740519 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.66 8.32208582834 92% => OK
difficult_words: 67.0 98.500998004 68% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.9071856287 84% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum six paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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