A recent study shows that people living on the continent of North America suffer 9 times more chronic fatigue and 31 times more chronic depression than do people living on the continent of Asia. Interestingly, Asians, on average, eat 20 grams of soy per day, whereas North Americans eat virtually none. It turns out that soy contains phytochemicals called Isoflavones, which have been found to possess disease-preventing properties. Thus, North Americans should consider eating soy on a regular basis as a way of preventing fatigue and depression.
The above argument tries to establish a direct link between soy consumption and chronic fatigue and chronic depression. The underlying basis of the argument is that soy foods contain phytochemicals called Isoflavones, which have been found to possess disease-preventing properties.
However, the disease is a much larger term which does not only include chronic fatigue and depression, but also a host of other conditions. Moreover, chronic fatigue and depression are the result of high profile life which leads to insomnia and stress. The chronic fatigue and depression can be the symptoms of some other diseases. The climatic conditions, economic stature and work environment of North America and Asian countries are very different from each other. The life styles of the people living in both the countries are different. The attitude of the people towards life is also different. Most of the population of Asian countries reside in rural areas. Hence, they are hard-working with agriculture as their only occupation and enjoy a stress free life. On the other hand, in North America, most of the people live in urban areas with a busy and stressful life. There is a need to find a direct relationship between soy foods and chronic fatigue and depression before arriving at any conclusion.
The second point is that chronic fatigue and depression are different from each other as there is no scientific study which reveals that fatigue and depression are same. You go to a psychologist to treat depression and a doctor for the treatment of fatigue problems. Above all, the author says that chronic fatigue is 9 times and depression is 31 times more in North Americans than their Asian counterparts. there is a huge difference in 9 and 31. Hence, there cannot be a same solution for the two different problems. There are definitely going to different reasons for the chronic fatigue and depression.
According to the author, soy foods contain phytochemicals called Isoflaveones, which possess disease preventing properties. Hence, there is a need of a research on the drugs that are used in the treatment of chronic fatigue and depression, whether these contain Isoflavones or not. Moreover, the author has not discussed about the side effects of isoflavones. However, we know that soy foods are good for health as these contain vital nutrients which are required for the growth of our body. But there is no solid evidence that soy foods are helpful in the treatment of chronic fatigue and depression. Therefore, we cannot relate any disease with the uptake of soy foods. The soy foods should be consumed with the prescription of a health expert.
In conclusion, the soy foods could be eaten for general health. The soy foods can be helpful in the treatment of some diseases whose symptoms can be chronic fatigue and depression. The author should have provided some solid proofs and statistical data to strengthen his argument.
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