There is no doubt that all parents what their child to have a promising futrue. When it comes helping their teenage children prepare the adult life, an increasing number of parents now ecourage thier kids to take a part-time. From my perspective, having some part-time work experience can help the children in many aspects.
Firstly, some experience coming from real society can help deminish the gap between the current study and work in the future for the teenages. By taking a part-time job, the teenages can really understand how the society works. They can know why something works and somes do not and try to use the knowledge the learn from school to solve the problems. These can help they become more practical and develop a way of critical thinking.
Secondly, taking a part-time job can help cultivate the personalities of independence and perservinance for the young generations. Since the teenages can always get ecommical or academic supports from their parents and teachers, it's hard for them to become independent. However, in a real part-time job, they canont rely their parents and students any more. Therefore they have to tackle many dificulties by themself. In this way they will become more independent and perserviant.
Finally, part-time job provides good oppotunities for teenages to practice their social skills.
From example, image a 15 year ago boy, who is very shy and afraid of communicating with strangers, taking a part-time job in a converience store. Because he has to chat with the customers every day, he have penenty chances to polish his sommunication skills. So constantly, this boy become more socialbe.
From what has been discussed abouve, we could safely draw the conclusion that taking a part-time job have many advanages for teenage children, so parents so encourge their kids to have this experience.
- TPO 24 - Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 88
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 73
- TPO 41 - integrated writing 80
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Teachers were more appreciated and valued by society in the past than they are nowadays.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 76
- TPO-20 - Independent Writing TaskDo you agree or disagree with the following statement?Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they know how to do well.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer. 90
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...parents now ecourage thier kids to take a part-time. From my perspective, having some part-...
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Suggestion:
...he children in many aspects. Firstly, some experience coming from real society...
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...mes do not and try to use the knowledge the learn from school to solve the problems. Thes...
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Suggestion: Therefore,
...ly their parents and students any more. Therefore they have to tackle many dificulties by...
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Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'has'.
Suggestion: has
...o chat with the customers every day, he have penenty chances to polish his sommunica...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
finally, first, firstly, however, if, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 3.0 15.1003584229 20% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1559.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 302.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.16225165563 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80008152719 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 176.0 212.727598566 83% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.582781456954 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 481.5 618.680645161 78% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 20.1344086022 84% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 38.8255792685 48.9658058833 79% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.7058823529 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.7647058824 20.6045352989 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.52941176471 5.45110844103 101% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.330938319142 0.236089414692 140% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.110549969652 0.076458572812 145% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0777208800526 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.180718948384 0.150856017488 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0588022854179 0.0645574589148 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.22 58.1214874552 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.35 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.3 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.0537634409 88% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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