You have enough money to purchase either a house or a business. Which would you choose to buy? Give specific reasons to explain your choice.
The necessity of having a home is intrinsic to human nature because we need to settle down in a place to establish our lives. On the other hand, manage a business is a demanding, arduous task which not everyone can do. Personally speaking, if I had a lot of money, enough to buy either a house or a company, I would definitely choose to purchase a house.
First of all, I do not own a house, and it is my plan to purchase one. I am currently living in my parents' house because I don't make enough money to afford rent. Although I believe that if I purchased a house right now, I would not move there immediately because I like living with my parents; I could rent that house and have an additional income. Additionally, I would not have to be so concerned about saving money each month to buy a house as I would already own one. I could save my money to travel, or to buy another property, but in a more relaxed way.
Second, I do not like businesses. As a geologist working doing research, I can say that I love my job and my field of work in general. Having a business would completely change my lifestyle, and I do not want this. I know the lifestyle of some business people, and I assume they are constantly stressed owing to all the tasks they have to accomplish in a limited amount of time. For example, my aunt Sara who manages a hotel in Cañete has to be permanently overlooking her employees. She barely has time for her family, and it is common to see her complaining about her demanding job. I do not want to have a similar lifestyle.
Third, having a house is a safe trade, but a business is not. If I bought a house, it would be mine as long as I want. Nevertheless, if I purchased a company, nobody knows when I am going to lose everything or when I am going to earn a lot of money. Money is not a relevant topic in my life. I just want to have enough to live comfortably in my own home. So, as purchasing a house is a safe deal, I would do that.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 124, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ly living in my parents house because I dont make enough money to afford rent. Altho...
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Line 3, column 157, Rule ID: AFFORD_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the infinitive: 'to rend', 'to rent'
Suggestion: to rend; to rent
...ause I dont make enough money to afford rent. Although I believe that if I purchased...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, nevertheless, second, so, third, as to, for example, in general, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 0.0 8.0752688172 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1590.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 382.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.16230366492 4.8611393121 86% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42095241839 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63085228282 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 192.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.502617801047 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 543.6 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.86738351254 375% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.6603493512 48.9658058833 81% => OK
Chars per sentence: 75.7142857143 100.406767564 75% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.1904761905 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.61904761905 5.45110844103 103% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.220759070787 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707663579466 0.076458572812 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0688457690823 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153705013909 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0681902185985 0.0645574589148 106% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 7.3 11.7677419355 62% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 6.85 10.9000537634 63% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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