As people rely more and more on technology to solve problems, the ability of humans to think for themselves will surely deteriorate.
Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
The definition of the term "technology" has been changing ever since it was first discerned. Looking back at the history we can easily scale all the definitions on a scale that starts from "need" and ends at "greed". Early humans needed to pave a path that leads towards technology to make their mundane life easier and to improve their chances of survival. It is this start that in no time, changed into a trend. Technology and development go hand-in-hand, as the population started to grow the changing requirements meant, developing something new to suffice the requirement. As people started exploring, as families they were scattered across the globe and to travel so far without an aid seemed unimaginably impossible then, hence came the invention of the wheel. From this basic part, technology evolved from a cart to automobiles. People never stopped and felt satisfied with the invention of a cart and they definitely saw scope to be able to develop something better, bigger and faster, this led them to "thinking" and got their dream of flying to reality, an extraordinary invention by the Wright brothers.
Ironically, we live in a society where people who develop the technology are considered an inspiration, on the other hand, we criticize the ones making use of it. If we could go back in time and change how the world worked back then and halt the technology from progressing, would we have this safe haven around us? Imagine the days before Thomas Edison, literally the dark phase, Imagine doing the daily chares in darkness, the thought in itself is horrifying. Things became much simpler and brighter after he invented the bulb for the purpose of spreading light in the city.
Technology is ubiquitous, it has permeated all over the globe. The problem lies not in technology, but in attributing a wrong meaning to the term technology. In today's world, the only gadget that we associate to, as a part of technology are cellphones and laptops acts as an agent of the virus, termed as social media. The current generation doesn't know how to limit their use on these gadgets, the reliance is so demanding that they cannot do without using them even for a day. Looking at the phone screen all day long, makes the body feel lethargic and kills the energy and drive to do anything beyond scrolling. Excessive talking over the phone also leads to similar problems. Scientists have proven that this type of usage can indirectly also damage the brain and kill ones drive to be creative and innovative and hence turn them indolent.
Technology is rampant, it has a dark side attached to it, but we must not disregard the attributes that count to its brighter side. Technology has made the task of a man easier. Shifting from handlooms to industries have provided employment, aeroplanes have made it easier to fly over continents within a few days, Smart homes have made daily life more interesting and secure. Paradoxically, as the reliance on the technology is increasing, so is the urge to develop innovation is, to do so, one needs to "think", positively and creatively. I believe that technology plays a great role in motivating the crowd into developing something, that can turn their perspective into reality.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 294, Rule ID: SAFE_HAVEN[1]
Message: Use simply 'haven'.
Suggestion: haven
...gy from progressing, would we have this safe haven around us? Imagine the days before Thom...
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Line 3, column 343, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...as social media. The current generation doesnt know how to limit their use on these ga...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, so, then, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.4196629213 56% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 14.8657303371 141% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.3162921348 97% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 33.0505617978 136% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 58.6224719101 128% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2731.0 2235.4752809 122% => OK
No of words: 545.0 442.535393258 123% => OK
Chars per words: 5.01100917431 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83169070408 4.55969084622 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05064288607 2.79657885939 109% => OK
Unique words: 309.0 215.323595506 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.566972477064 0.4932671777 115% => OK
syllable_count: 869.4 704.065955056 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 6.24550561798 128% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.38483146067 91% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.2370786517 119% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.3598241501 60.3974514979 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.791666667 118.986275619 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7083333333 23.4991977007 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.58333333333 5.21951772744 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 5.13820224719 136% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.83258426966 124% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0833269570278 0.243740707755 34% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0233775383596 0.0831039109588 28% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0166427096504 0.0758088955206 22% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0507737284836 0.150359130593 34% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0107179605819 0.0667264976115 16% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.5 14.1392134831 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 48.8420337079 101% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.92365168539 141% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.1743820225 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.07 12.1639044944 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.38706741573 103% => OK
difficult_words: 135.0 100.480337079 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.8971910112 88% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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