TPO17(independent)Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.

Advertisement’s product has been a burning global issue. Some specialists argue that most advertisements show the commodities with a much better look than they are. Personally, I agree with this argument.

First and foremost, what I put in my priority is the company’s development. The fact is that giving notice of better quality than reality, the manufactured items are highly likely to catch the customer’s attention. This encourages more purchasers to buy exaggerated products. Therefore, the sale campaign is certain to acquire an enormous evolution. It brings a great advantage to the thriving process of the company. More importantly, a more beautiful introduction tends to become the symbol of the products which is the distinctive characteristic of the company. Thus, the company that owns this is bound to be pushed up to a higher level, and this company is supposed to defeat all other rivals. It is the essence of customers' inclination that works to the advantage of this company. It follows that the company’s revenue is likely to be upgraded. Beyond any doubt, the use of exaggeration when making products known encourages the company to get the triumph in the rivalry.

On the other hand, it is claimed that exaggerating the item quality causes the extremely great loss of prestige. Consequently, the economy is certain to fall into an enormous crisis. However, it is just applicable to a minority. In fact, the company always has a strategy to veil the real quality of products. For this reason, the buyers are certain to use them without discredit. In addition, bringing the commodities to the public with better and inaccurate quality creates chances for the popularity of the company to be expanded. This is the crucial thing that prompts the company to get into the investors' view. As a result, these are supposed to estimate company efficiency and realize the potential of this. Subsequently, there is a likelihood that they subsidize a great deal of money for the company. In that case, the economy of the company inclines to be enhanced remarkably. By and large, the claim that introducing the products with unreal quality causes the economic recession is unrealistic.

In summary, for all the mentioned above, exaggerating products is a compelling topic. It is strongly advised that specialists should take my writing into great consideration to guideline an appropriate policy on the advertisement’s product.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, however, if, look, so, therefore, thus, in addition, in fact, in summary, as a result, by and large, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2076.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26903553299 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.2323388801 2.67179642975 121% => OK
Unique words: 201.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.510152284264 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 665.1 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 11.0 3.08781362007 356% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.8554301439 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 79.8461538462 100.406767564 80% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.1538461538 20.6045352989 74% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.34615384615 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145238107315 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0385762864896 0.076458572812 50% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0656349288543 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126590360709 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11938916983 0.0645574589148 185% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 58.1214874552 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.69 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.59 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 105.0 86.8835125448 121% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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