The environment protection group has appealed to the residents of Youngstown to not allow the smith corporation to develop the land in the Youngstown Wildlife Preserve. To support this the writer states that the sanctuary is essential to the survival of the 300 species of birds that reside there .And the building of the hotel by Smith corporation would not benefit the community which relies on tourist bird watchers.
Firstly the writer states the sanctuary is essential for the existence 300 bird species This may not be the case . These 300 species may as well thrive without the sanctuary.In this case, giving a small amount of land for hotel won't affect. them The writer should give more information about the extend of dependence of these birds on the sanctuary.
Secondly the writer states the only a small amount land is being given to the corporation . This amount of land will be negligible compared to the area of sanctuary. And may not have a huge impact on the environment .The writer talks about disastrous consequences for that area but fails to mentions those consequence.hence the writer should give more information about These consequences to make the argument compelling.
Thirdly the write states that the building of the hotel will not benifit the community which relies on bird watching tourists .But it is possible that the presence of nearby accomodation like a hotel would in-fact attract more tourist and will infact a help the community.
and even if it doesn't attract tourist the building of hotel will require labour which can be provided by local population which will give economic boost to the locals.
Consequently the petition to the residents of Youngtown by an environment protection group has many flows and they should solve these flaws and give additional information to make their argument compeling.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 9 15
No. of Words: 306 350
No. of Characters: 1521 1500
No. of Different Words: 140 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.182 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.971 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.706 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 104 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 76 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 59 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 39 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 34 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 18.16 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.434 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.434 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.149 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 203, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...serve. To support this the writer states that the sanctuary is essential to the s...
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Line 1, column 298, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...e 300 species of birds that reside there .And the building of the hotel by Smith c...
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Line 1, column 300, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: And
...300 species of birds that reside there .And the building of the hotel by Smith corp...
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Line 1, column 350, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ilding of the hotel by Smith corporation would not benefit the community which re...
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Line 2, column 113, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...00 bird species This may not be the case . These 300 species may as well thrive wi...
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Line 2, column 174, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
...ay as well thrive without the sanctuary.In this case, giving a small amount of la...
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Line 2, column 187, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...rive without the sanctuary.In this case, giving a small amount of land for hotel ...
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Line 2, column 242, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Them
...l amount of land for hotel wont affect. them The writer should give more information...
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Line 2, column 242, Rule ID: SENT_START_THEM[1]
Message: Did you mean 'Then'?
Suggestion: Then
...l amount of land for hotel wont affect. them The writer should give more information...
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Line 2, column 293, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...iter should give more information about the extend of dependence of these birds on the san...
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Line 3, column 90, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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Suggestion: .
...t land is being given to the corporation . This amount of land will be negligible ...
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Line 3, column 215, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
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...ot have a huge impact on the environment .The writer talks about disastrous conseq...
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Suggestion: The
... have a huge impact on the environment .The writer talks about disastrous consequen...
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Line 3, column 291, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'mention'.
Suggestion: mention
...consequences for that area but fails to mentions those consequence.hence the writer shou...
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Line 3, column 300, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this consequence' or 'those consequences'?
Suggestion: this consequence; those consequences
...ces for that area but fails to mentions those consequence.hence the writer should give more infor...
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Line 4, column 9, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
... make the argument compelling. Thirdly the write states that the building of the hotel w...
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Line 4, column 126, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...y which relies on bird watching tourists .But it is possible that the presence of ...
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Line 4, column 127, Rule ID: SENTENCE_WHITESPACE
Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: But
...which relies on bird watching tourists .But it is possible that the presence of nea...
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Line 5, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: And
... and will infact a help the community. and even if it doesnt attract tourist the b...
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Line 5, column 16, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...t a help the community. and even if it doesnt attract tourist the building of hotel w...
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Line 6, column 1, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Consequently,
...ill give economic boost to the locals. Consequently the petition to the residents of Youngt...
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Line 6, column 56, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e petition to the residents of Youngtown by an environment protection group has m...
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Line 6, column 123, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ion group has many flows and they should solve these flaws and give additional in...
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Line 6, column 208, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ation to make their argument compeling.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, firstly, hence, if, may, second, secondly, so, third, thirdly, well
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 19.6327345309 41% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 12.9520958084 108% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 19.0 28.8173652695 66% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 20.0 16.3942115768 122% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1546.0 2260.96107784 68% => OK
No of words: 303.0 441.139720559 69% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10231023102 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.17215713816 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76674302588 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 140.0 204.123752495 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.46204620462 0.468620217663 99% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.67365269461 239% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 22.8473053892 118% => OK
Sentence length SD: 67.5389082843 57.8364921388 117% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.545454545 119.503703932 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.5454545455 23.324526521 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.45454545455 5.70786347227 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 24.0 5.25449101796 457% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.242632525867 0.218282227539 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111242628129 0.0743258471296 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0767185358438 0.0701772020484 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.116242263173 0.128457276422 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0988148937652 0.0628817314937 157% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.4 14.3799401198 114% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 48.3550499002 109% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 12.197005988 103% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 12.5979740519 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.26 8.32208582834 99% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 12.3882235529 109% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.1389221557 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 54.17 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.25 Out of 6
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