It goes without saying that, we as Homo sapiens, live in an age when our lifestyle has undergone extreme changes. Our ambitious that once was like a dream for us has become a reality. For instance, in a century ago people even didn’t have mental imagination (subjective background) about devices like cellphone or TV, as we are not able to expect the next generation of these devices. Personally believe that both telephone and television, as communicational tools, are major game-changers in our life that have played a key role in our technological and scientific advancements. It is actually difficult to highlight the influence of one of them and assume the superiority of one over the other. The following essay takes a look at the influence of both of the mentioned innovations in our lives, ultimately reaching a reasonable conclusion.
When we hear the name of television, a bell rings in the brain of most of us that recall a particular movie, cartoon or TV show. In fact, although we consider the TV as communicational device, it somewhat acts like presenter or has an instructor role. Where in which the establishment of the connection is one-way or so-called unilateral communication. This means everything it presents we are indispensable to watch and our authority is diminished up to selecting the channels no more than that. If we look from a psychological perspective, this is the TV that gives us a lesson and has influence over us through the provided recipe by owners. Contrary to this attitude, the TV has brought us: awareness, pleasure, literacy, and knowledge. These criteria are only attributed to the TV and no one can find it in else devices, so it can be accountable for it as an advantage.
Unlike TV, through telephone, connection to the party makes it feasible to share their ideas and express their emotions and hear the others voice. Suppose a mother that missed her child after dialing up can be able to talk with her son or daughter and this is a sweet part of the story. Initially, the telephones were used merely for talking, but now by monumental achievements in this field the new generation of cellphones is introduced that bears extraordinary abilities. These cellphones, in addition to preserving its previous and main duty, are capable to do the responsibility of the TV. Moreover, you can use it as a small computer and pursue your occupations and do your business. Playing game, listening to music, making a video call and video conference, scheduling your programs, alarm clock, tacking photo and recording film are some the features of cellphones that made it multifunctional device. The most sticking feature of it, in my view, is the extension of its capabilities via installing the desired app which makes it more powerful, strong, favorable and exciting.
All things considered, we can easily conclude that at the present state the telephone's advantages outweigh over television's privileges. The reason is that the present telephones can be the TV too but inverse state is not true.
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to succeed, you should be more like others than be different from everyone else. (100207CN=081011NA) 76
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Telephone has greater influence on people’s lives than television has. 90
- Agree or disagree Movies and TV programs made in your own country are more interesting comparing to movies and programs made in other countries 64
- Do you agree or disagree with following statement people who move out of their native village or towns are more successful and happier than people who stay in their native villages or towns. 85
- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People would be happier with fewer possessions 59
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 228, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...e TV too but inverse state is not true.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, if, look, moreover, so, for instance, in addition, in fact, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2537.0 1977.66487455 128% => OK
No of words: 507.0 407.700716846 124% => OK
Chars per words: 5.00394477318 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.74517233601 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.10432470726 2.67179642975 116% => OK
Unique words: 286.0 212.727598566 134% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.564102564103 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 820.8 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.2157857566 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.318181818 100.406767564 115% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.0454545455 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.86363636364 5.45110844103 71% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0984713711745 0.236089414692 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0253851359245 0.076458572812 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0245164122719 0.0737576698707 33% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0577139962734 0.150856017488 38% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246193996332 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.02 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.23 8.01818996416 115% => OK
difficult_words: 143.0 86.8835125448 165% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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