Over the course of several years, many people have been opting for individualism or nuclear family, rather than a large family. In my opinion, the value of the extended family has been decreasing. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, the vast majority of people have a busy lifestyle, which restricts to spend time with relatives. There is a widely held belief that long-term success depends on hard-working and creativity, meaning that it is better to give more attention to job or study than keep in touch with family members. In fact, communications in everyday life give insights into the relationship among members of a family. For example, a man who lives in a large family is attempting to be the chief manager of his office, which requires a lot of efforts and staying focused. As long as he attains it, he will gain so much profit. Therefore, he prefers residing in a quiet place with a small family or in loneliness, because the man needs to focus on his job. As a result, to his way of thinking, the big family appears to be distracting and not essential.
Secondly, the young generation is drawn by the latest technology, which can instigate the separation of elder people. They consider a conversation between peers, especially in social network websites, is more important rather than listen to the advice of aunts, uncles and grandparents. It is noteworthy that the more youngsters ask for a piece of advice, the more mature they will become by the old generation's wisdom. In contrast, youth do not prefer it, they opt to play computer games, watch entertaining movies, etc. My friend's experience is a compelling example of this. He always online on every social site, such as Facebook, Instagram, Telegram as well as Twitter. He thinks that as assumptions and opportunities have changed, we can exchange our ideas throughout the globe, which is a key factor in broadening our horizons. Like my friend, many young adults hold this belief. Consequently, the importance of large family will become secondary for the majority of people.
To sum up, at present the value of extended family is not fundamental than it was in the past. This is because people are living with a busy lifestyle and because thoughts have changed by the advent of high technology.
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Essay reference notes: This topic is refereed from another essay topic, developed by user: smovahed
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 402, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'generations'' or 'generation's'?
Suggestion: generations'; generation's
...more mature they will become by the old generations wisdom. In contrast, youth do not prefe...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, i feel, in contrast, in fact, such as, as a result, as well as, first of all, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 57.0 52.1666666667 109% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1938.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 398.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.86934673367 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46653527281 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80928793191 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572864321608 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.8273917238 48.9658058833 77% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.2857142857 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.9523809524 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.52380952381 5.45110844103 156% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.137849987152 0.236089414692 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0386754394443 0.076458572812 51% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0455448626615 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0862919224886 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025111396765 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.54 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 78.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.5 Out of 30
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