According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies actually increased during the past year. Clearly, the contents of these reviews are not reaching enough of our prospective viewers. Thus, the problem lies not with the quality of our movies but with the public's lack of awareness that movies of good quality are available. Super Screen should therefore allocate a greater share of its budget next year to reaching the public through advertising.
In this argument, the advertising director of the super screen movie production company claims that past year, fewer people have attended super screen produced movies than in any other year. The director also claims that even though few people have attended movies, percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers have increased. From this, the director claims that these reviews are not reaching to viewers. Thus, from this unsubstantianing and unwarranted evidences and claims the director comes to a conclusion that the production company must invest a greater share of its budget next year in advertising so that the public are aware of their good movies. The conclusion is not only based on unsubstantiated evidences but also fails to address questions that might weaken the director's conclusion.
Firstly, the directors claims that there is percentage increase in positive reviewers on "specific" super screen movies. here, the director fails to notice that this increase in positive reviews is only for "specific" movies and not for many of the movies produced by that company. Therefore, here, the director fails to answer to question that for how many movies, did the production company received positive reviews. if the director would have provided evidences that answer this question, like statistics or survey indicating number of movies produced by the production company receiving positive reviews would have strengthened the director's conclusion.
also, the director claims that these reviews are not reaching to the viewers. here the director failed to produced more evidences that support this claim. For example, if the director advertised these reviews during office time of public, then these advertisements are of vain. even though, if the director increases share of company's budget in advertising, it will not be effective as the advertising company might advertise during time of the public, hence it is waste of money. so if the director would have provided the timmings of the advertisement it would have strengthened his claim.
To conclude, if the author would have provided the answers to number of movies that received good reviews and the timmings that theses reviews are advertised then it would have strengthened his conclusion.
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- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition.Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree 54
- According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced movies than in any other year. And yet the percentage of positive reviews by movie reviewers about specific Super Screen movies a 46
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 10 15
No. of Words: 354 350
No. of Characters: 1873 1500
No. of Different Words: 135 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.338 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.291 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.714 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 148 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 107 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 84 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 44 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 35.4 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 16.722 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.8 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.509 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.69 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.227 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 783, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'directors'' or 'director's'?
Suggestion: directors'; director's
...address questions that might weaken the directors conclusion. Firstly, the directors...
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Line 4, column 132, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Here
...pos;specific' super screen movies. here, the director fails to notice that this...
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Line 4, column 441, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...tion company received positive reviews. if the director would have provided eviden...
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Line 4, column 457, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had provided'?
Suggestion: had provided
...eived positive reviews. if the director would have provided evidences that answer this question, li...
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Line 4, column 658, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'directors'' or 'director's'?
Suggestion: directors'; director's
...ive reviews would have strengthened the directors conclusion. also, the director cla...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Also
...ngthened the directors conclusion. also, the director claims that these reviews...
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Line 7, column 79, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Here
...eviews are not reaching to the viewers. here the director failed to produced more ev...
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Line 7, column 175, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... support this claim. For example, if the director advertised these reviews during...
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Line 7, column 280, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Even
... then these advertisements are of vain. even though, if the director increases share...
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Line 7, column 434, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...vertising company might advertise during time of the public, hence it is waste of...
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Line 7, column 484, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: So
...the public, hence it is waste of money. so if the director would have provided the...
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Line 7, column 484, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[3]
Message: “so if” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...the public, hence it is waste of money. so if the director would have provided the ti...
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Line 7, column 503, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had provided'?
Suggestion: had provided
...t is waste of money. so if the director would have provided the timmings of the advertisement it wo...
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Line 10, column 28, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had provided'?
Suggestion: had provided
... claim. To conclude, if the author would have provided the answers to number of movies that re...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, hence, if, so, then, therefore, thus, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 19.6327345309 51% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 12.9520958084 77% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 13.6137724551 110% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 28.8173652695 115% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 55.5748502994 72% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1945.0 2260.96107784 86% => OK
No of words: 354.0 441.139720559 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.49435028249 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96179536734 2.78398813304 106% => OK
Unique words: 143.0 204.123752495 70% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.40395480226 0.468620217663 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 600.3 705.55239521 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 4.96107784431 20% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 2.70958083832 185% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 19.7664670659 76% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 22.8473053892 101% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5431938925 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.666666667 119.503703932 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6 23.324526521 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.06666666667 5.70786347227 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 14.0 5.25449101796 266% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 6.88822355289 87% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.262241092557 0.218282227539 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.111959371916 0.0743258471296 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.131201863912 0.0701772020484 187% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17589783484 0.128457276422 137% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108267507535 0.0628817314937 172% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.2 14.3799401198 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.67 48.3550499002 82% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.86 12.5979740519 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.59 8.32208582834 91% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 98.500998004 64% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.1389221557 101% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 58.33 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.5 Out of 6
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