The following appeared in a memorandum from the business department of the Apogee Company:
“When the Apogee Company had all its operations in one location, it was more profitable than it is today. Therefore, the Apogee Company should close down its field offices and conduct all its operations from a single location. Such centralization would improve profitability by cutting costs and helping the company maintain better supervision of all employees.”
The memorandum from the business department of the Apogee company proposes to change from decentralized operations unit they have now to centralized operations unit they had in the past in order to improve the efficiency of the operations by cutting costs and thus leading to improved profits.But the argument is flawed because of lack of sufficient evidence to prove that the present model of operations is worse than the centralized model they had in the past.
Firstly,the argument states that they were profitable in the past compared to present scenario but they only point out to the change in the operations of the company.But there could have been many factors that have led to reduced profits.for example we can consider factors such as increase in competition,a better alternative to existing product,change in the demographic,usage of older technology which increases the costs etc.They only point to a single factor <span class="hiddenGrammarError" pre="claim "></span><span class="hiddenSuggestion" pre="the "></span>of reduction in profitability without citing sufficient data to show the cause and effect relationship.
Secondly,they claim that centralized operations is far better than decentralized without showing any proof of why one is better compared to the other and also they haven’t considered the cost that would be necessary for the restructuring of the whole operations from decentralized to centralized and also about the transfer of employees who were working at various places to the centralized operations location.This could lead to a massive protest and also resignations of employees who are against it and it will be too costly for the company to hire employees with similar experience as those who would leave in case of centralization.
So,to sum it up it is better for the business department of the Apogee company to consider all the factors affecting the profitability of the company and even if the claim they have made is true then they ought to consider the costs involved in restructuring of the entire operations of the business.
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Essay evaluation report
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 6 15
No. of Words: 341 350
No. of Characters: 1711 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.297 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.018 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.028 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 113 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 95 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 67 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 47 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 56.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 24.586 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.478 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.802 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.134 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ts and thus leading to improved profits.But the argument is flawed because of lack ...
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...d model they had in the past. Firstly,the argument states that they were profitab...
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...change in the operations of the company.But there could have been many factors that...
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... factors such as increase in competition,a better alternative to existing product,...
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...a better alternative to existing product,change in the demographic,usage of older techn...
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...isting product,change in the demographic,usage of older technology which increases the...
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...echnology which increases the costs etc.They only point to a single factor ^^^^
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...citing sufficient data to show the cause and effect relationship. Secondly,th...
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... and effect relationship. Secondly,they claim that centralized operations is fa...
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... to the centralized operations location.This could lead to a massive protest and als...
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...d leave in case of centralization. So,to sum it up it is better for the business...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, second, secondly, so, then, thus, for example, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 12.9520958084 54% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 55.5748502994 110% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 16.3942115768 61% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1809.0 2260.96107784 80% => OK
No of words: 324.0 441.139720559 73% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.58333333333 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.56307096286 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.10082291621 2.78398813304 147% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 204.123752495 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.468620217663 107% => OK
syllable_count: 569.7 705.55239521 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 4.0 8.76447105788 46% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.22255489022 24% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 19.7664670659 20% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 81.0 22.8473053892 355% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 160.614445179 57.8364921388 278% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 452.25 119.503703932 378% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 81.0 23.324526521 347% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 21.25 5.70786347227 372% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 11.0 5.25449101796 209% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 6.88822355289 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.67664670659 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.205106780549 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.135614411358 0.0743258471296 182% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.049766831663 0.0701772020484 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.135614411358 0.128457276422 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049766831663 0.0628817314937 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 45.4 14.3799401198 316% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -27.66 48.3550499002 -57% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 21.2 7.1628742515 296% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 37.2 12.197005988 305% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 16.27 12.5979740519 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.31 8.32208582834 136% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 98.500998004 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 31.0 12.3882235529 250% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 34.4 11.1389221557 309% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 31.0 11.9071856287 260% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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