It cannot be ignored that "media" serves its vitality in delivering the news about sports, entertainment, Weather forecast, upcoming movies, and other new arrivals throughout the world. But besides this, they starts to pay special attention to the lives of Actors, singers or footballers. Media is not concern about lives of an ordinary people or a common man, which cannot be overlooked.
To begin with, Media considered to be as a helping hand or a provider of relevant amount of information which is get displayed on TV, Newspapers, Magazines, journals, etc. Nowadays, young people especially students, teens get influenced by the media, generally people live in different areas have different mode of information to share with their family members and friends. Sometimes media only focuses on eminent personalities which includes celebrities, sports personalities or singers, further they only focuses on where they are going, clothing, likes, dislikes, hobbies etc. and forget about general public or a common people, people starts to comparing themselves to celebrities, and what they found at last is that they all are just a common people, who are struggling to attain one meal for their survival, a feeling of living in a false paradise is been set up within the people.
On the other hand, Media should report the common man while, listening to them they must show their condition of survival, needs and struggle as well. however, media also helps in maintaining a positive relation between government and public, but sometimes they do not able to reach to people living in rural areas or villages this results in, feeling of discomfort and cornering of people from media. In my opinion, media should maintain a proper balance between paying attention to celebrities and lives of ordinary people respectively. They should report about living of common people living in different areas. Nowadays, media works as a powerful weapon for triggering information about each and every field including science, technology, politics, music etc which is been displayed on TV.
To sum up, media should work as a helping tool towards lives of ordinary people by reporting or listening them properly. They may display the real life hero's of our society on TV, this will help others to learn, understand and inspire from common people i.e, full of hard work, imparting rigorous efforts to work and thus succeeding in there ones life.
I thank you for grading me,
I thank you for grading me, but please guide me in following things:- (mainly difficulty I am been facing while writting task2)
(1) Topic sentence
(2) how to gather ideas on the spot while writting T-2
(3) Grammar especially had been, have been, whilst, etc.
(4) Short of ideas while writting body paragraph2
(5) a proper balance between positive and negative points/proposal
hope u helps me!
Let me try your questions:
Let me try your questions:
(1) Topic sentence
Answer: Topic sentences are your opinions, for example, for this essay, we may say: media should focus on both, celebrities and common peoples.
(2) how to gather ideas on the spot while writing T-2.
Answer: you mean the structure/organization of Task II? Most people like this structure :
para 1: introduction.
para 2: idea one. first, reason one....second, reason two....
para 3: however, I still support idea two. reason one....reason two...
para 4: conclusion...
according to this structure, your essay is not well organized.
(3) Grammar especially had been, have been, whilst, etc.
Answer: you may read a grammar book.
(4) Short of ideas while writing body paragraph 2
Answer: ideas ==advantages or ideas ==disadvantages
advantages like: save time, save money, make friends, get more info...
disadvantages like: waste time, waste money, make bad friends, transfer bad info...
(5) a proper balance between positive and negative points/proposal
Answer: this is not serious but overall, don't always support one side or always against one side. Try to develop ideas in two sides.
Essay evaluation report
Thank you, Bella for the answers.
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flaws:
This essay is not well organized.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 394 350
No. of Characters: 1978 1500
No. of Different Words: 214 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.455 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.02 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.639 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 155 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 105 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 74 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 46 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 32.833 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.137 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.398 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.603 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.129 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 220, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[2]
Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'start'
Suggestion: start
...ghout the world. But besides this, they starts to pay special attention to the lives o...
^^^^^^
Line 1, column 377, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...n ordinary people or a common man, which cannot be overlooked. To begin with, ...
^^
Line 3, column 599, Rule ID: GENERAL_XX[1]
Message: Use simply 'public'.
Suggestion: public
...dislikes, hobbies etc. and forget about general public or a common people, people starts to co...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 5, column 152, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: However
...f survival, needs and struggle as well. however, media also helps in maintaining a posi...
^^^^^^^
Line 7, column 343, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
...ts to work and thus succeeding in there ones life.
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, however, if, look, may, so, thus, well, while, in my opinion, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 13.1623246493 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 10.4138276553 192% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 24.0651302605 104% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 41.998997996 150% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2055.0 1615.20841683 127% => OK
No of words: 393.0 315.596192385 125% => OK
Chars per words: 5.22900763359 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.20363070211 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78606085248 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 225.0 176.041082164 128% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572519083969 0.561755894193 102% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 506.74238477 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.10420841683 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 0.809619238477 618% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 62.4367843568 49.4020404114 126% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.785714286 106.682146367 138% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.0714285714 20.7667163134 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.92857142857 7.06120827912 126% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.67935871743 150% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.289876499845 0.244688304435 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126937209689 0.084324248473 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.104228564365 0.0667982634062 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.184483057858 0.151304729494 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0646256852098 0.056905535591 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 13.0946893788 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 43.06 50.2224549098 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 11.3001002004 126% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.35 12.4159519038 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.92 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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