Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today s society To what extent do you agree with this view

Submitted by a1492dc on Sun, 03/30/2014 - 23:10

Someone said: "the advertisement is the soul of commerce". That's why we are completely surrounded by advertisements everywhere. Nowadays we can see advertising on the TV, on internet, on the streets, on the mobile. Many people are now noticing how advertising methods are becoming not only invasive, but also unacceptable.

First of all we have to notice that advertising methods can reach us in whatever activity we are doing. When we are walking on the street, watching the television, listening to the radio or browsing on the internet, we receive heaps of explicit messages of advertising. T...

*** The full content of this essay is available to VIP readers

Votes
Average: 8.6 (5 votes)
Essay Categories
IELTS Writing Task II - IELTS Academic
Essays by the user:
>>> more essays by the user >>>

Despite most of the advertisements are explicit,
Description: Check books how to use 'Despite '

we can see some actor
we can see some actors

flaws:
Don't use 'Not only...but also' a lot times in one essay

Sentences need to be polished. First step, read essays by top users:
http://www.testbig.com/users/sfaht1
http://www.testbig.com/users/tessy-james
http://www.testbig.com/users/mrmo2610
http://www.testbig.com/users/nader
http://www.testbig.com/users/subodh860
http://www.testbig.com/users/azizkhan
http://www.testbig.com/users/newuser
http://www.testbig.com/users/misterwandering
http://www.testbig.com/users/elaine-10
http://www.testbig.com/users/habiba
http://www.testbig.com/users/mandy192q
http://www.testbig.com/users/grt2bagal
http://www.testbig.com/users/nikita
http://testbig.com/users/pip-depp
http://testbig.com/users/lynmelissa
http://testbig.com/users/justin

and more:
http://www.testbig.com/essay-categories/ielts

Attribute Value Ideal
Score: 6.0 out of 9
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 2 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 265 350
No. of Characters: 1318 1500
No. of Different Words: 159 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.035 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.974 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.799 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 99 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 81 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 58 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 32 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.667 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.353 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.326 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.592 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.157 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5

Well, you will need to write better sentences. That's the reason we asked you read more essays by top users and check out how they are doing for essays writings.

and in the meantime, submit more essays. Write at least one essay per day to check out the progress.

Try to put more content when you are practising. Put around 350 words if possible.

Try this pattern:

Para 1: introduction. my choice: A or B. agree or disagree.

Para 2:First,reason 1 (1 sentence) + why reason 1(some arguments. 2-3 sentences) + examples for reason 1 (around 2 sentences) + small conclusions (like advantages of reason 1 or comparisons if not reason 1, 1-2 sentences).

Para 3:Second,reason 2 ,blabla... do the same thing like First

Para 4:Third, reason 3 blabla... do the same thing like First but shorter

Para 5: Conclusion.

You have the great potential to reach 7.5 or over.