Integrated Essay writing
Rembrandt Painting
The reading and the lecture are both about a painting for rembrandt. The author of the article believes that this painting is not original and it doesn't reflect rembrandt style. However, the lecturer refutes the claims mentioned in the article.
First of all, the article states that how the woman is dressed in the painting casts doubt that the painting is not a genuine work of rembrandt. Although the woman in the painting appear wearing a luxurious fur collar that's only for aristocrats, she appears also wearing white linen cap which is only for servants. this point is challenged by the lecturer. According to the lecture, the speaker says that the luxurious fur collar was added about a hundred years later to the original painting to increase the value of it. Thus, the lecture refutes all the arguments mentioned in the article
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...at this painting is not original and it doesnt reflect rembrandt style. However, the l...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: that's
...g appear wearing a luxurious fur collar thats only for aristocrats, she appears also ...
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Line 3, column 316, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: This
...e linen cap which is only for servants. this point is challenged by the lecturer. Ac...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, so, thus, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 5.04856512141 0% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 7.30242825607 27% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 5.0 12.0772626932 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 9.0 22.412803532 40% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 30.3222958057 46% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 0.0 5.01324503311 0% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 700.0 1373.03311258 51% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 142.0 270.72406181 52% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.92957746479 5.08290768461 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.45201032557 4.04702891845 85% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46696081356 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 79.0 145.348785872 54% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556338028169 0.540411800872 103% => OK
syllable_count: 209.7 419.366225166 50% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 3.25607064018 61% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.23620309051 73% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 1.25165562914 80% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 2.5761589404 39% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 8.0 13.0662251656 61% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 17.0 21.2450331126 80% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.6958242244 49.2860985944 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5 110.228320801 79% => OK
Words per sentence: 17.75 21.698381199 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5 7.06452816374 78% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.09492273731 49% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 4.19205298013 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 4.45695364238 90% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.27373068433 70% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.187741642558 0.272083759551 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0850992081446 0.0996497079465 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0869633812627 0.0662205650399 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167736096041 0.162205337803 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0342444480042 0.0443174109184 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 13.3589403974 80% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 62.68 53.8541721854 116% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 11.0289183223 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 12.2367328918 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.42419426049 93% => OK
difficult_words: 30.0 63.6247240618 47% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.8 10.498013245 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.2008830022 80% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Minimum four paragraphs wanted. The correct pattern:
para 1: introduction
para 2: doubt 1
para 3: doubt 2
para 4: doubt 3
Less contents wanted from the reading passages(25%), more content wanted from the lecture (75%).
Don't need a conclusion paragraph.
Read sample essays from ETS:
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Minimum 150 words wanted.
Rates: 40.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 12.0 Out of 30
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