The two pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in Canada in 2005 and 2010.
Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts illustrate the information about proportion about the online sales for various retail fields in Canada from 2005 to 2010.
In overall,electronics and appliances constituted a main retail sector of online shopping in particular nation during both years;because,video games and home furnishings attained least percentage.
It can be clearly seen from the information that electronic and appliance field accounted more than a third of the total percentage for online sales in 2005 in Canada;however,a decreased of 5% noticed during 2010.In addition to this, a 10% of difference can be observed in online shopping for home furnishings between 2005(25%) and 2010(15%) in specific country.
The charts further show that proportion in Canada of online sales for food and beverage was over a fifth in 2005(22%);whilst,an increase of one in ten can be seen in 2010(32%).Lastly,the percentage of online shopping for video games in Canada was 23% in 2010 and 18% in 2005 respectively.
- Some people think that modern technology is making people more sociable,while others think it is making them less sociable. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 73
- The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. 61
- The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992.Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant. 56
- Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country’s police or military force such as the army. While others think women are not suitable for these kinds of jobs. Discuss both views and give your opinion. 73
- The charts below show what percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the 78
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, lastly, third, in addition, in particular
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 7.0 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 1.00243902439 299% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 4.0 5.60731707317 71% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 33.7804878049 92% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 3.97073170732 176% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 833.0 965.302439024 86% => OK
No of words: 154.0 196.424390244 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.40909090909 4.92477711251 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.52273666998 3.73543355544 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.55573885418 2.65546596893 134% => OK
Unique words: 86.0 106.607317073 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.558441558442 0.547539520022 102% => OK
syllable_count: 246.6 283.868780488 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 3.36585365854 59% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 8.94146341463 45% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 38.0 22.4926829268 169% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.5029585281 43.030603864 196% => OK
Chars per sentence: 208.25 112.824112599 185% => OK
Words per sentence: 38.5 22.9334400587 168% => OK
Discourse Markers: 13.5 5.23603664747 258% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 1.69756097561 412% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320953309628 0.215688989381 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.202045286802 0.103423049105 195% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0672689009253 0.0843802449381 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.202045286802 0.15604864568 129% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0672689009253 0.0819641961636 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 23.3 13.2329268293 176% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 32.91 61.2550243902 54% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.51609756098 172% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 18.1 10.3012195122 176% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.69 11.4140731707 129% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.42 8.06136585366 117% => OK
difficult_words: 38.0 40.7170731707 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.5 11.4329268293 171% => OK
gunning_fog: 17.2 10.9970731707 156% => OK
text_standard: 20.0 11.0658536585 181% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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More content wanted.
Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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