The chart below gives information about the most common sports played in New Zealand in 2002.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The rendered bar chart depicts the information about the sports which were played by the girls and boys in New Zealand in year 2002

It is manifest that netball was maximum played by the girls.which totalled 25%.which was closely followed by the boys who played soccer accounting for 24%.cricket was played by 10% boys whereas girls played just 1%this game. athletics was played by girls and boys approximately same number.swimming was played by 22% girls whereas just 13% boys take part in swimming

Further scruting reveals that the proportion of boys who played marital arts , basketball and tennis was almost same and the percentage of girls who played material arts ,basketball ,tennis ,and Soccer was 3% ,6% ,8% and 5% respectively the negligible number of boys played natwal 18% boys played other games whereas the number of girls 10%

To conclude it is listed that the maximum girls played netball whereas soccer was playing maximum in boys

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Average: 6.7 (1 vote)
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IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic

Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 226, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Athletics
... whereas girls played just 1%this game. athletics was played by girls and boys approximat...
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Line 3, column 367, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...reas just 13% boys take part in swimming Further scruting reveals that the propo...
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Line 5, column 17, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... Further scruting reveals that the proportion of boys who ...
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Line 5, column 78, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...oportion of boys who played marital arts , basketball and tennis was almost same a...
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Line 5, column 171, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...entage of girls who played material arts ,basketball ,tennis ,and Soccer was 3% ,6...
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Line 5, column 183, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...rls who played material arts ,basketball ,tennis ,and Soccer was 3% ,6% ,8% and 5%...
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Line 5, column 191, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...played material arts ,basketball ,tennis ,and Soccer was 3% ,6% ,8% and 5% respect...
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Line 5, column 210, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...s ,basketball ,tennis ,and Soccer was 3% ,6% ,8% and 5% respectively the negligibl...
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Message: Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
Suggestion: ,
...asketball ,tennis ,and Soccer was 3% ,6% ,8% and 5% respectively the negligible nu...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, so, whereas

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 7.0 157% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 3.15609756098 285% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 6.0 5.60731707317 107% => OK
Preposition: 16.0 33.7804878049 47% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 3.97073170732 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 800.0 965.302439024 83% => OK
No of words: 157.0 196.424390244 80% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.09554140127 4.92477711251 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.53976893118 3.73543355544 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5827748344 2.65546596893 97% => OK
Unique words: 82.0 106.607317073 77% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.522292993631 0.547539520022 95% => OK
syllable_count: 208.8 283.868780488 74% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.33902439024 23% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 1.0 3.36585365854 30% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 2.0 8.94146341463 22% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 78.0 22.4926829268 347% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 131.0 43.030603864 304% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 400.0 112.824112599 355% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 78.5 22.9334400587 342% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 7.5 5.23603664747 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 1.69756097561 530% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 2.0 3.70975609756 54% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.09268292683 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.120656039762 0.215688989381 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120454663388 0.103423049105 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0605431167214 0.0843802449381 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.118117216031 0.15604864568 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107696721255 0.0819641961636 131% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 41.8 13.2329268293 316% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: 17.69 61.2550243902 29% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 0.0 6.51609756098 0% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 30.2 10.3012195122 293% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 13.48 11.4140731707 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.03 8.06136585366 137% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.0 11.4329268293 236% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 33.2 10.9970731707 302% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 27.0 11.0658536585 244% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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