There is a common belief that young people can be taught for leadership in various fields (eg. government, industry) through cooperation. In a such a competitive society, cooperation with others is highly valued, because you can get smarter and more experiences through learning based on others' experiences and knowledge.
First of all, to come up with some kind of innovation, you need knowledge in diverse fields. For example, if one wants to develop some kind of exoskeleton, it is really difficult to make it up by your own effort if you are just a mechanical engineer. You would need to cooperate with an electrical engineer to come up what kind of sensors and actuators you need to install. Also, you would need a control engineer to come up with some kind of contorl algorithm so that it results natural trajectory of a human ankle. If you want to make it a startup, probably, you could ask a help from economist to deal with financial matters. Therefore, cooperation would help you to get assisstance from other specialists.
Secondly, networking is a good way of getting more knowledgable about various things around us. By talking to diverse kind of people, you can get different information from others and get more knowledgable. For example, in scientific conferences, scholars share their ideas and this can help one to improve their research and make it more competitive. Also, another professor you meet in the conference may suggest an advice to solve your research problem.
Thirdly, networking with people may be advantageous to get some kind of help in the future. For instance, if you are looking for a PhD position, one of your contacts you have made throughout your life may suggest a good supervisor. This tiny
However, there are some peope who thinks that leadership can be taught through competitition. This may be true, because it make help you to have some kind of distinciton from others. If you cooperate with people and develop something in a team, your effort may be lost in that and noone would see you as a leader.
In conclusion, I think that leadership can only be taught through cooperation, because networking is a best way of getting information, sharing experience or ask some kind of help from your contacts to make your career better.
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- The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition. 50
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, look, may, really, second, secondly, so, therefore, third, thirdly, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, kind of, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.5258426966 72% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 12.4196629213 161% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 14.8657303371 61% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.3162921348 53% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 58.6224719101 109% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 12.9106741573 101% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1904.0 2235.4752809 85% => OK
No of words: 386.0 442.535393258 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93264248705 5.05705443957 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43248042346 4.55969084622 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87409284391 2.79657885939 103% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 215.323595506 84% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.468911917098 0.4932671777 95% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 704.065955056 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 6.24550561798 160% => OK
Article: 0.0 4.99550561798 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.10617977528 225% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.38483146067 114% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 23.0359550562 87% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1317083691 60.3974514979 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.210526316 118.986275619 84% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.3157894737 23.4991977007 86% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.73684210526 5.21951772744 167% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.97078651685 121% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 7.80617977528 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 10.2758426966 107% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 5.13820224719 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.113432744637 0.243740707755 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0469664493279 0.0831039109588 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572814002532 0.0758088955206 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0821887318482 0.150359130593 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604556590165 0.0667264976115 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 14.1392134831 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 48.8420337079 122% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 12.1743820225 81% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 12.1639044944 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.38706741573 99% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 100.480337079 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 11.8971910112 71% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 11.2143820225 89% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 11.7820224719 85% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.