One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.
We have a famous sentence in our country (Afghanistan) that says, "Life is an art and you’re an actor." it means try to act as a strong actor. i like this statement. So, i think it is an excellent idea that parents encourage their children to get ready for another phase of life or adulthood and help them to find a part time job. However, it is imprtant for children to have a part-time job. So, it is help them to support their life like, self-finance, passionate for future and to be strong on their life. i really like and encourage the parents that have the same idea for their teenage children.
First, i believe that all parents should encourage their teenagers to find a part time job for themselves. However, this idea help them to provide their self-finance. For instance, when i was teenager my parents encourage me to find a part time job because i should support my life in university. In fact, i should pay my fees. Moreover, i am agree with the essay statement that says, “Parents can help their teenagers to get ready for another phase of life and encourage them to find a part time job." i like this statement and i do not like another person support my life.
Second, i believe that it is necessary for all parents to encourage their teenagers to find a part time job. And passionate them to stand by themselves. So, i believe life is difficult they should prepare for everything. However, they should know how to make money. For instance, my father provide a part time job when i was in school and i start finding money. After, two years my father died. So, i continue my life without any tension because i made money and i knew the difficulties of life.
Third, when parents provide some part time job for their teenagers or encourage them to find that. So, it means they make them strong in life. For instance, i start working when i was child so now i support my life and sometimes i help my parents too. However, i encourage my teenage children to follow the same direction and support them to find a part time job. i love this idea. and suggest for all parents to do the same.
To sum up, as i mentioned in above lines i am agree with essay statement that says, "it is the best if parents encourage or help their teenagers to find a part time job. because they can support their life. Like, they can be strong in their life, they can support their finance issues and they can find passionate to continue their life in the right ways. i usually have a proverb "No pain no gain".
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, moreover, really, second, so, third, for instance, i think, in fact, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 10.4613686534 115% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 7.30242825607 219% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 12.0772626932 99% => OK
Pronoun: 90.0 22.412803532 402% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 45.0 30.3222958057 148% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 5.01324503311 219% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2088.0 1373.03311258 152% => OK
No of words: 463.0 270.72406181 171% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50971922246 5.08290768461 89% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63868890866 4.04702891845 115% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.55966042862 2.5805825403 99% => OK
Unique words: 163.0 145.348785872 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.352051835853 0.540411800872 65% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 661.5 419.366225166 158% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.55342163355 90% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 25.0 3.25607064018 768% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 8.23620309051 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 1.25165562914 320% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.51434878587 132% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 13.0662251656 214% => Too many sentences.
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 54.6511198235 49.2860985944 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.5714285714 110.228320801 68% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.5357142857 21.698381199 76% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.5 7.06452816374 50% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 43.0 4.19205298013 1026% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 19.0 4.33554083885 438% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.476730702861 0.272083759551 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.158845004487 0.0996497079465 159% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.124443471421 0.0662205650399 188% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.33195708812 0.162205337803 205% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0494382534172 0.0443174109184 112% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 13.3589403974 61% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 53.8541721854 134% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 11.0289183223 65% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.58 12.2367328918 70% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.27 8.42419426049 74% => OK
difficult_words: 54.0 63.6247240618 85% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.7273730684 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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