Overweight in many countries is a common problem and citizens’ health and fitness level is also decreasing. What are the causes of this problem and what could be done to tackle this problem?

Healthy living has beacome a buzzword in recent years. it is true that in several countries obesity has become persistanant issue which result in the deterioration of individual's health. therefore, I am going to highlight the causes and solutions of this grave issue.
To begin with, In these days people are confronting many predicaments related to overweight. Firstly people are preferring to have sedentary lifestyle due to evolution of technology, as a result of which people don't need to move their physics as much as before. secondly people have comprehensively included themselfs in the work, irrespective of thinking about their health. For instance these days people use vehicles such as cars and motobikes etc is also one of the most common cause of obesity.
Furthermore, the availability of non nutrious food at an economical price in comparison to organic food because of this deterioration of health is prevalent which result in serious problems like diabities, hypertention and so on.
However, to overcome with this hazard better initiatives at right time should be adopted by goverment. For example, by eastablish a law which set a limit to built fast food outlet at everyplace. Furtherance not only working people but also student should also be guide properly by gaints about negetive impact of junk food.
In addition to, promotion of public transport, good diet campaigns by goverment and incorporating more and more sports as well as physical activities are the main treatements and undoubtly a natural way to improve health.
To sum up, fruitful outcome can only possible, when people changes their personal choices and they will understand that everthing is associated with health weather it is money, happiness and so on.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, well, for example, for instance, in addition, such as, as a result, as well as, it is true, to begin with, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 7.85571142285 64% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 10.4138276553 86% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 41.998997996 114% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.3376753507 120% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1472.0 1615.20841683 91% => OK
No of words: 280.0 315.596192385 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.25714285714 5.12529762239 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.09062348924 4.20363070211 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.97145432681 2.80592935109 106% => OK
Unique words: 182.0 176.041082164 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.65 0.561755894193 116% => OK
syllable_count: 466.2 506.74238477 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 5.43587174349 37% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 16.0721442886 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.8177619398 49.4020404114 107% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.230769231 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5384615385 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 15.5384615385 7.06120827912 220% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.38176352705 137% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.01903807615 179% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 8.67935871743 69% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147041819242 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0460809131402 0.084324248473 55% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0370340203096 0.0667982634062 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0639992706209 0.151304729494 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0364407701567 0.056905535591 64% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 13.0946893788 108% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 41.7 50.2224549098 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 11.3001002004 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.47 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 78.4519038076 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 9.78957915832 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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