The following is a petition to the city council of Centerville:
"Over the past three years, there has been a marked increase in cases of 'sidewalk rage,' similar to the irrational anger drivers experience on the road, but instead among sidewalk walkers. The result is an increase in assaults, property damage, and disruptions of normal pedestrian traffic. In order to address this growing problem, the council must ban cell phone use on sidewalks. Not only do people texting or using their phones slow down pedestrian traffic, but they are also more likely to walk into the road or bump into other walkers. Children are especially vulnerable because they are too short to be easily seen. Middletown passed such a ban and not only have they heard no complaints, but the reported incidents of sidewalk crime has gone down significantly."
The author claims that the city council of Centerville should ban cell phone use on sidewalks. However, in order to better evaluate his point, more information would be needed. Although the author's reasons could be true, because of rife of assumptions and lack of evidence, his argument is flawed and unsubistantieted.
First, the author does not provide a convincing reason to explain why the cases of sidewalk rage are related with an increase in assaults. This increase in assauts in Centerville could be caused for different reasons, and not necesarily because of the sidewalk rage. It if possible that the number of thiefs increased in the city, and it is also possible that the people started to report assalts more often to the police, which would explain the increase.
Second, the author argues that to adress the problem of sidewalk rage, the city council should ban the cell phone use on sidewalks. However, maybe the cause of sidewalk rage is not the cell phone use, but a normal increase in the number of people walking on the sidewalk. This could be a result of an increase of population, or increase in the number of tourists visiting the city. An inneficient public transportation could also affect the number of people using the sidewalk, because they walk to their jobs or houses instead of taking a bus, for example. In these cases, ban the cell phones would not solve the problem.
Finally, the author also assumes that the ban of cell phones in Centerville will be effective because it reduced the sidewalk crimes in Middletown. However, something that worked in Middletown not necessarily will work in Certerville, because the cities could be very different in terms of size, people and other caractheristics. Even if the cities are similar, he does not provide evidence to support that the reason why Middletown had a decrease in sidewalk crimes is because the ban of cell phones. Maybe Middletown implemented other measures to reduce the sidewalk crime, and then implementing the ban in Centerville would not have the same effect. To strenghten his argument, the author should provide information about how similar the cities are, and also show evidence that the decrease in crimes in Middletown were caused only by the ban of cell phone use on sidewalks.
In conclusion, because of unwanrranted assumptions, the author fails in providing a convincing case that the city council should ban the cell phone use on sidewalks.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 17 15
No. of Words: 408 350
No. of Characters: 1993 1500
No. of Different Words: 163 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.494 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.885 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.661 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 154 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 104 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 38 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 6.66 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.706 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.39 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.604 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.123 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, then, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 19.6327345309 71% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 12.9520958084 116% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 13.6137724551 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 28.8173652695 73% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 55.5748502994 101% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2071.0 2260.96107784 92% => OK
No of words: 408.0 441.139720559 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.07598039216 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49433085973 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80531703757 2.78398813304 101% => OK
Unique words: 177.0 204.123752495 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.433823529412 0.468620217663 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 650.7 705.55239521 92% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.76447105788 91% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 2.70958083832 221% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.67365269461 358% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 19.7664670659 86% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.54603992 57.8364921388 68% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.823529412 119.503703932 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.0 23.324526521 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.23529411765 5.70786347227 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 6.88822355289 160% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.67664670659 21% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.114041830523 0.218282227539 52% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0479616487956 0.0743258471296 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0352425697477 0.0701772020484 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0752079825186 0.128457276422 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0303923649449 0.0628817314937 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.48 12.5979740519 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.32208582834 98% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 98.500998004 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 12.3882235529 69% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.