Fifteen years ago, Omega University implemented a new procedure that encouraged
students to evaluate the teaching effectiveness of all their professors. Since that time, Omega
professors have begun to assign higher grades in their classes, and overall student grade
averages at Omega have risen by thirty percent. Potential employers apparently believe the
grades at Omega are inflated; this would explain why Omega graduates have not been as
successful at getting jobs as have graduates from nearby Alpha University. To enable its
graduates to secure better jobs, Omega University should now terminate student evaluation of
professors
Given that, the memo from a dean at Omega University claims that Omega University should now terminate student evaluation of professors, which was implemented fifteen years ago. To support the recommendation dean make some assumptions which have several flaws. Due to lack of sufficient amount of evidence the recommendation will be unsubstantiated.
Firstly, citing about attaining of good grades of student after the implementation of student evaluation of professors, dean make a conclusion that new procedure was the reason for giving good grades of professor and gaining good grades of students. But it is possible that before the implementation of new procedure teachers did not evaluate the exam paper properly. On the other hand, it can be possible that after the implementation student performance was increased. So, Dean assumption is not valid. If he gives proper evidence, then his recommendation will more persuasive.
In addition, dean argues that potential employers believe the grades at omega are inflated. For supporting his assumption he gives example of another university and claims that despite of good result students of Omega University, students are getting less job. But it cannot be claimed without substantiate evidence that higher grade is responsible for this. There a lot of internal and external reasons for which a job applicant can be rejected for a job interview. For instance, mental pressure of applicant on interview day, interview environment, interview performance etc. So, Dean should provide convincing evidence to prove his argument more persuasive.
Finally, dean makes a comparison between Omega University and Alpha University. But he do not give any description about Alpha university teaching method or grading system. It can be possible that the grading system of Alpha University is more flexible and students get higher grade than Omega University. For this Students get good job. It can also be possible that Alpha University has a good alumni association which helps student to get job.
All in all, Dean Recommendation is not based on proper evidence. To bolster his recommendation he could give explicitly reasons and description of his assumption. In consequence, before terminate student evaluation of professors, Omega University should conduct more investigation on it.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 21 15
No. of Words: 358 350
No. of Characters: 1929 1500
No. of Different Words: 171 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.35 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.388 4.6
Word Length SD: 3.094 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 145 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 118 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 64 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 17.048 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.581 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.524 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.318 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.523 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.12 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 68, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ning of good grades of student after the implementation of student evaluation of ...
^^
Line 5, column 214, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ason for giving good grades of professor and gaining good grades of students. But...
^^
Line 13, column 88, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'he' must be used with a third-person verb: 'does'.
Suggestion: does
...University and Alpha University. But he do not give any description about Alpha un...
^^
Line 13, column 311, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[1]
Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...higher grade than Omega University. For this Students get good job. It can also be p...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, firstly, if, so, then, for instance, in addition, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 19.6327345309 81% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 12.9520958084 85% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 11.1786427146 89% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 27.0 28.8173652695 94% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 30.0 16.3942115768 183% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1994.0 2260.96107784 88% => OK
No of words: 358.0 441.139720559 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.56983240223 5.12650576532 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.56307096286 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.16470092086 2.78398813304 114% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 204.123752495 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.483240223464 0.468620217663 103% => OK
syllable_count: 638.1 705.55239521 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.59920159681 113% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 1.0 8.76447105788 11% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.67365269461 179% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.22255489022 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.8473053892 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 46.4962675122 57.8364921388 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.6363636364 119.503703932 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2727272727 23.324526521 70% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.27272727273 5.70786347227 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.25449101796 76% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.20758483034 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.175625307754 0.218282227539 80% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0552016560664 0.0743258471296 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596586733454 0.0701772020484 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113503117289 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0388585072249 0.0628817314937 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.9 14.3799401198 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 38.31 48.3550499002 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 12.197005988 98% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.73 12.5979740519 117% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.49 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 98.500998004 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 12.3882235529 97% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 11.1389221557 75% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 11.9071856287 101% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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