Seven years ago, homeowners in nearby Brookville community adopted a set of restrictions on how the community's yards should be landscaped and what colors the exteriors of homes should be painted. Since then, average property values have tripled in Brookville. In order to raise property values in Deerhaven Acres, we should adopt our own set of restrictions on landscaping and housepainting.
In this letter, the arguer recommends that homeowners in Deerhaven Acres (DA) should follow certain rules when it comes to landscaping and house painting to increase their property values. To support this recommendation, that arguer points out that homeowners in Brookville community property values increased tremendously by following a set of restrictions on landscaping and house painting seven years ago. This argument rests on a series of unsubstantiated assumptions, and is therefore unpersuasive as it stands.
To start with, the arguer points out that homeowners in Brookville community property values have tripled after landscaped their yards and painted their exteriors in a certain way. Hence, he straightly declares that following a set of restrictions in landscaping and house painting are the only ways to raise their property values. However, let us give it a second thought: if the arguer views the set of restrictions as the only reason and/or the immediate cause to increase property values in Brookville, then he should give other evidence to support that other factors will not increase property values. Actually, there are many other factors can cause the increase of property values. For instance, newly opened businesses nearby Brookville community such as schools, banks, and other institutions may increase the property values. A further investigation on what are the factors that can increase property values is needed before the arguer can sweep out the doubt whether landscaping and house painting in a certain way can raise property values.
Further, the arguer points out that by adopting a set of restriction on landscaping and house painting increased property values in Brookville community seven years ago. Nevertheless, here lies a flaw in the arguer’s assumption: this statement highlights the fact that it was seven years ago. Basically, it is highly possible that landscaping and house painting cannot increase property values in Brookville in the present days. If the arguer can present studies or research that shows landscaping and house painting raised the property values in recent years, then we can have a more precise picture of the feasibility of this recommendation of this conclusion.
Even assuming that landscaping and house painting are the only ways to raise Brookville community property values and studies have shown that landscaping and house painting raised the property values in recent years, the arguer fails to consider the difference in place. Essentially, in his assumption exists a noticeable flaw: Brookville and DA are two completely different communities and are located differently. To be specific, it is invalid to transfer what worked for Brookville to DA without taking a regional approach because they are different communities and they are not comparable. Therefore, without ruling out such possibility, the arguer cannot simply assume that landscaping and house painting with certain restrictions can increase property values in DA.
In sum, to persuade us that following certain rules in landscaping and house painting will increase property values in DA, the arguer must supply clear evidence that following a set of restrictions in landscaping and house painting are the only ways to raise their property values as well as presenting a studies or research that shows landscaping and house painting raised the property values in recent years. In addition, to better assess the recommendation, we would need to know why Brookville and DA are comparable even though they are two completely different communities. If the argument had included the given factors discussed above, it would have been, so at least it seems to me, more thorough and logically acceptable.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 20 15
No. of Words: 583 350
No. of Characters: 3101 1500
No. of Different Words: 214 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.914 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.319 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.919 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 245 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 182 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 151 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 88 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 29.15 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 12.018 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.6 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.424 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.582 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.219 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 17, column 304, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[1]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a study' or simply 'studies'?
Suggestion: a study; studies
...r property values as well as presenting a studies or research that shows landscaping and ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, hence, however, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, then, therefore, well, at least, for instance, in addition, such as, as well as, to start with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 19.6327345309 92% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 18.0 12.9520958084 139% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 11.1786427146 233% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 18.0 13.6137724551 132% => OK
Pronoun: 47.0 28.8173652695 163% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 69.0 55.5748502994 124% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 16.3942115768 91% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3187.0 2260.96107784 141% => OK
No of words: 582.0 441.139720559 132% => OK
Chars per words: 5.47594501718 5.12650576532 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.91168771031 4.56307096286 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.98972281454 2.78398813304 107% => OK
Unique words: 221.0 204.123752495 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.379725085911 0.468620217663 81% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 964.8 705.55239521 137% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 4.96107784431 141% => OK
Article: 7.0 8.76447105788 80% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.22255489022 237% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 19.7664670659 101% => OK
Sentence length: 29.0 22.8473053892 127% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 70.4467706854 57.8364921388 122% => OK
Chars per sentence: 159.35 119.503703932 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.1 23.324526521 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.75 5.70786347227 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 8.20758483034 158% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 6.88822355289 58% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.67664670659 64% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.282629617911 0.218282227539 129% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.109726842771 0.0743258471296 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0797636801174 0.0701772020484 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.188309145635 0.128457276422 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396602937287 0.0628817314937 63% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.9 14.3799401198 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 48.3550499002 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 12.197005988 130% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.1 12.5979740519 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.32208582834 94% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 98.500998004 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 11.1389221557 122% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.9071856287 118% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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