"Over the past two years, the number of shoppers in Central Plaza has been steadily decreasing while the popularity of skateboarding has increased dramatically. Many Central Plaza store owners believe that the decrease in their business is due to the number of skateboard users in the plaza. There has also been a dramatic increase in the amount of litter and vandalism throughout the plaza. Thus, we recommend that the city prohibit skateboarding in Central Plaza. If skateboarding is prohibited here, we predict that business in Central Plaza will return to its previously high levels.
this editorial concludes that the city should ban skateboarding from its downtown central plaza in order to attract visitors to that area, to return the area to its "former glory," and to make it "a place where people can congregate for fun and relaxation." To justify this conclusion the editorial points out that skateboarders are nearly the only people one sees anymore at central plaza, and that the plaza is littered and its property defaced. The editorial also points out that the majority of downtown merchants support the skate boarding ban. this argument is flawed in several critical respects.
First, the editorial's author falsely assumes that a ban on skateboarding is both necessary and sufficient to achieve the three stated objectives. perhaps the city can achieve those objectives by other means as well--for example, by creating a new mall that incorporates an attractive new skateboard park. even if banning skateboarders altogether is necessary to meet the city's goals, the author has not shown that this action by itself would suffice. assuming that the plaza's reputation is now tarnished, restoring that reputation and, in turn, enticing people back to the plaza might require additional measures--such as removing litter and graffiti, promoting the plaza to the public, or enticing popular restaurant or retail chains to the plaza.
Secondly, the editorial assumes too hastily that the plaza's decline is attributable to the skateboarders--rather than to some other phenomenon. perhaps the plaza's primary appeal in its glory days had to do with particular shops or eateries, which were eventually replaced by less appealing ones. Or perhaps the crime rate in surrounding areas has risen dramatically, for reasons unrelated to the skateboarders' presence at the plaza. without ruling out these and other alternative explanations for the plaza's decline, the editorial's author cannot convince me that a skateboard ban would reverse that decline.
Thirdly, the editorial's author might be confusing cause with effect--by assuming that the skateboarders caused the abandonment of the plaza, rather than vice versa. it is entirely possible that skateboarders did not frequent the plaza until it was largely abandoned—and because it had been abandoned. In fact this scenario makes good sense, since skateboarding is most enjoyable where there are few pedestrians or motorists to get in the way.
Fourth, it is unreasonable to infer from the mere fact that most merchants favor the ban that the ban would be effective in achieving the city's objectives. Admittedly, perhaps these merchants would be more likely to help dean up the plaza area and promote their businesses were the city to act in accordance with their preference. Yet lacking any supporting evidence the author cannot convince me of this. Thus the survey amounts to scant evidence at best that the proposed ban would carry the intended result.
finally, the author recommends a course of action that might actually defeat the city's objective of providing a fun and relaxing place for people to congregate. In my experience skateboarding contributes to an atmosphere of fun and relaxation, for adults and children alike, more so than many other types of ambiance. without considering that continuing to allow skateboarding--or even encouraging this activity--might achieve the city's goal more effectively than banning the activity, the author cannot convincingly conclude that the ban would be in the city's best interests. In sum, the argument is a specious one.
To strengthen it, the editorial's author must provide dear evidence that skateboarding, and not some other factor, is responsible for the conditions marking the plaza's decline. The author must also convince me that no alternative means of restoring the plaza are available to the city, and that the proposed ban by itself would suffice to attract tourists and restore the plaza to its former glory. finally, to better assess the argument it would be useful to know the circumstances under which the downtown merchants would be willing to help the city achieve its objectives.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.0 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 18 15
No. of Words: 658 350
No. of Characters: 3397 1500
No. of Different Words: 293 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.065 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.163 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.818 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 249 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 194 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 140 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 93 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 36.556 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 19.599 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.5 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.352 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.398 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.094 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 2 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, finally, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, thus, well, for example, in fact, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 19.6327345309 122% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 12.9520958084 162% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 11.1786427146 206% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 28.0 13.6137724551 206% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 55.0 28.8173652695 191% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 55.5748502994 135% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 16.3942115768 98% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3481.0 2260.96107784 154% => OK
No of words: 651.0 441.139720559 148% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.34715821813 5.12650576532 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.05120793913 4.56307096286 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.0521859828 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 312.0 204.123752495 153% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.479262672811 0.468620217663 102% => OK
syllable_count: 1102.5 705.55239521 156% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 12.0 8.76447105788 137% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.70958083832 74% => OK
Conjunction: 7.0 1.67365269461 418% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 12.0 4.22255489022 284% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 19.7664670659 126% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 82.2661631535 57.8364921388 142% => OK
Chars per sentence: 139.24 119.503703932 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.04 23.324526521 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.04 5.70786347227 88% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 5.15768463074 39% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 17.0 5.25449101796 324% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 8.20758483034 171% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.148748104369 0.218282227539 68% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0426810482143 0.0743258471296 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0426985213001 0.0701772020484 61% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112514172049 0.128457276422 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0493256793654 0.0628817314937 78% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.8 14.3799401198 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.63 48.3550499002 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 7.1628742515 156% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 12.197005988 120% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.05 12.5979740519 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.07 8.32208582834 109% => OK
difficult_words: 171.0 98.500998004 174% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 12.3882235529 161% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 11.9071856287 126% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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