Schools should do more to prepare students for the non-academic aspects of adulthood.
Students are at their prime of being shaped and moulded to be better suited for their future during their adolescence in school. Teachers play an integral role in this. The prompt suggests that schools should be more inclined to teaching students aspects of life which are beyond academic purposes. I strongly agree with this for the following two reasons.
"Mitochondria is the powerhouse of the cell" - this infamous scientific fact is deep-rooted in our minds during our schooling period which benefits to none in our quotidian lives. Although people might argue that it helps in laying a strong base for the students who wish to pursue science as a major, it renders as a useless fact to others. Academic studies will have unquestioned importance at any instance of time, but it can certainly be balanced out by teaching students aspects of adulthood beyond books whose utility is much higher. For instance, a student might benefit a lot more by understanding how to file for taxes on his/her own rather than being taught how it works. Schools should rather focus on introducing a broad variety of academic topics to students and teach practical aspects of it. The student can, later on, focus on an individual academic topic of his/her inclination to explore it beyond the practical utility of it. Thus striking a balance between academic and non-academic aspects should be considered in such scenarios.
Academics can play a very helpful role for bright students who can consider themselves as having a clear path in pursuing the same in their adulthood. But it might not be the case for the entire mass. A student who excels in archery might not be inclined to study the intricacies of how "nuclear fission" works. It would benefit that student more if he/she focuses on improving his/her skills to ensure success in archery which in turn might have a good impact in shaping the future of that student. Focusing just on academics hinders the growth of such students who don't fall in general group.
It might be considered that some may argue that reducing academic importance in school would have a negative impact on the number of students focusing on majoring in a certain field. It is far more important to have a flexible curriculum based on the student as it ensures that more students walk out of school well prepared with non-academic aspects of life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, may, so, thus, well, for instance, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 19.5258426966 77% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 12.4196629213 137% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 14.8657303371 34% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 33.0505617978 118% => OK
Preposition: 63.0 58.6224719101 107% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 12.9106741573 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2007.0 2235.4752809 90% => OK
No of words: 400.0 442.535393258 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.0175 5.05705443957 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.55969084622 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74233495265 2.79657885939 98% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 215.323595506 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5125 0.4932671777 104% => OK
syllable_count: 613.8 704.065955056 87% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59117977528 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 6.24550561798 80% => OK
Article: 4.0 4.99550561798 80% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.10617977528 32% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.77640449438 113% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.38483146067 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.2370786517 89% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 23.0359550562 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0037101241 60.3974514979 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.5 118.986275619 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.2222222222 23.4991977007 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.0 5.21951772744 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 7.80617977528 26% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 10.2758426966 117% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.83258426966 103% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.405817137848 0.243740707755 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132601309588 0.0831039109588 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.100140174147 0.0758088955206 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.270297348769 0.150359130593 180% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0606073715802 0.0667264976115 91% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 14.1392134831 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.8420337079 118% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.1743820225 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.1639044944 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.38706741573 101% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 100.480337079 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 11.8971910112 67% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.2143820225 96% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.7820224719 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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