34 integreted writing
The reading material is talking about the probable reasons of the extinction of the Steller's sea cows. However, the professor in the listening material believe that we actually do not know what caused the extinction of the sea cows and the reasons in the reading material all have problems.
Firstly, the reading thinks that maybe the overhunting on the sea cows by native Siberian people is the reason, for sea cows was a perfect food source to the Siberian people in that harsh environment. So Siberian people could have hunted sea cows a lot and resulted their extinction. Nevertheless, the professor points out that sea cows is a sort of massive creatures, one sea cow can serve as the food of a Siberian village for couple of months. Considering the population of the Siberian people is not very large, their hunting on sea cows could not lead to the extinction.
Secondly, the reading holds the view that ecosystems disturbance could make the amount of sea cows' main food source, kelp, to decrease dramaticallly, which can be the reason of the extinction. Nonetheless, the professor proposes that if an ecosystems disturbance did happen, marine animals other than kelp in that area would also diminish. However, fishing record shows that such decreasing has not happened ever, so this can not be the reason of the extinction.
Finally, the reading argues that European fur traders with weapons that can quickly kill sea cows can be the reason. These people probably kill the sea cows to extinction only for their profitable fur and they caught the last sea cows. However, the professor shows the fact that the population of sea cows was already quite small when European fur traders arrived that area. Their amount is supposed to be much larger before that time. Therefore, something happened before the arrival of the fur traders caused the decreasing of the sea cows and the traders could not result the extinction.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 43, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'ecosystems'' or 'ecosystem's'?
Suggestion: ecosystems'; ecosystem's
...condly, the reading holds the view that ecosystems disturbance could make the amount of se...
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Line 9, column 241, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'ecosystems'' or 'ecosystem's'?
Suggestion: ecosystems'; ecosystem's
...less, the professor proposes that if an ecosystems disturbance did happen, marine animals ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, finally, first, firstly, however, if, may, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, therefore, sort of, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 10.4613686534 105% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 5.04856512141 198% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 7.30242825607 55% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 15.0 12.0772626932 124% => OK
Pronoun: 21.0 22.412803532 94% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 30.3222958057 102% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 5.01324503311 259% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1615.0 1373.03311258 118% => OK
No of words: 324.0 270.72406181 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98456790123 5.08290768461 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.24264068712 4.04702891845 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6089632324 2.5805825403 101% => OK
Unique words: 149.0 145.348785872 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.45987654321 0.540411800872 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 479.7 419.366225166 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 3.25607064018 92% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 2.5761589404 78% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 13.0662251656 107% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 21.2450331126 108% => OK
Sentence length SD: 39.4320003685 49.2860985944 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.357142857 110.228320801 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1428571429 21.698381199 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.0714285714 7.06452816374 143% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.09492273731 98% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 4.19205298013 48% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 4.33554083885 23% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.27373068433 187% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.272083759551 0% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.0996497079465 0% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0662205650399 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.162205337803 0% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0443174109184 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.3589403974 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 53.8541721854 105% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 11.0289183223 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.2367328918 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.65 8.42419426049 91% => OK
difficult_words: 59.0 63.6247240618 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.498013245 107% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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