IELTS Writing Task I - IELTS Academic 8 Test 1
The data given indicates the main reasons of land degradation and the differences between their effects on three different regions in the 1990s.
It is noticeable from the pie chart that 93% of global land was degraded because of three main reasons: deforestation, over-cultivation and over-grazing. Specifically, too much animal grazing makes up in 35%, following by forest clearance with 30%. A further 28% of global degradation is due to over crop cultivation. Other causes accounts for the stay 7% of degraded agricultural land collectively.
According to the data in the table, the region which suffered degraded farmland mostly is Europe, which accounted for 23% of total farmland . Deforestation and over-cultivation were the main causes for land becoming less productive in Europe (at 9.8% and 7.7% respectively). Standing at the second place is Oceania which had 13% of land degraded. In contrast to Europe, the main reason for land degradation in this area was over-grazing, which constituted 11,3%. North America is the least affected by land degradation. The total land degraded was nearly a quarter of Europe's amount and half of Oceania's one. The main reason for this was over-cultivation of crops (at 3.3%).
In conclusion, over-grazing was the major cause of land degradation and Europe is the mostly affected region.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 123, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ostly is Europe, which accounted for 23% of total farmland . Deforestation and ov...
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Line 9, column 142, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
...ich accounted for 23% of total farmland . Deforestation and over-cultivation were...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, second, so, in conclusion, in contrast, in contrast to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 7.0 171% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 6.8 88% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 3.15609756098 158% => OK
Pronoun: 5.0 5.60731707317 89% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 33.7804878049 112% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 3.97073170732 302% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1138.0 965.302439024 118% => OK
No of words: 211.0 196.424390244 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.39336492891 4.92477711251 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.81127787577 3.73543355544 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.22449738881 2.65546596893 121% => OK
Unique words: 121.0 106.607317073 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.57345971564 0.547539520022 105% => OK
syllable_count: 335.7 283.868780488 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.45097560976 110% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 1.53170731707 65% => OK
Article: 6.0 4.33902439024 138% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.07073170732 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 0.482926829268 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 3.36585365854 149% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 13.0 8.94146341463 145% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 22.4926829268 71% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.1186778597 43.030603864 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 87.5384615385 112.824112599 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2307692308 22.9334400587 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.46153846154 5.23603664747 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 3.83414634146 104% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 1.69756097561 118% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 1.0 3.70975609756 27% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 10.0 1.13902439024 878% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.09268292683 49% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0 0.215688989381 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0 0.103423049105 0% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0843802449381 0% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0 0.15604864568 0% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0 0.0819641961636 0% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 13.2329268293 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 61.2550243902 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.51609756098 135% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.3012195122 92% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.69 11.4140731707 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.06136585366 101% => OK
difficult_words: 50.0 40.7170731707 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.9970731707 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.0658536585 81% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 11.2359550562 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 9
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