Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

There are a few things in the world that can cross the border of countries, races, ages to combine people together. Music is one of these things. I completely agree with the opinion that music ties human beings together because of its feature as a beauty and culture convenor.

As a form of arts, the primary function of music is to presents beauty and express emotions. Human beings share the same feelings, no matter happiness or sadness, passions or desperations, which all can be aroused and awaked by a piece of melody. Scientists already proved that when listening to music, the area controlling emotions in the human brain will be stimulated at the same time. This brain reaction to music is a general phenomenon and has no difference between people from diverse backgrounds and with tremendous age gaps. In this case, music is a perfect medium to convey human feelings, and therefore, combine people together despite various cultures, genders or ages.

Another reason that music can break language and cultural barriers to gather people together relys on its function to spread civilization. Aparting from its merely artistic characteristics, music is also a communicating tool among people from different nationalities and with diverse languages. Through this form of art, people can make themselves to be heard, felt and understood. Taking the song "My Country" as an example. It is the song written specially to celebrate the 70th birthday of China and broadcasted world-widely via radio and TV channels as well as the internet. Numerous non-Chinese left massages on FaceBook or Twitter to say that even though they couldn't understand the language, they still can sense the Chinese history and culture from the song and be touched by the strong love to the country conveyed in it.

To sum up, music is an effective way to put people in diversity together by stimulating sympathy via its artistic features and spreading cultures by crossing language barriers.

Votes
Average: 8.1 (3 votes)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'present'.
Suggestion: present
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: couldn't
...or Twitter to say that even though they couldnt understand the language, they still can...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, if, so, still, therefore, well, as well as, to sum up

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 13.1623246493 91% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 10.4138276553 173% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 7.30460921844 96% => OK
Pronoun: 20.0 24.0651302605 83% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 41.998997996 119% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1666.0 1615.20841683 103% => OK
No of words: 323.0 315.596192385 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.15789473684 5.12529762239 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.20363070211 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8263964858 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 176.041082164 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.588235294118 0.561755894193 105% => OK
syllable_count: 512.1 506.74238477 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 5.43587174349 92% => OK
Article: 2.0 2.52805611222 79% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.76152304609 63% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.8529907347 49.4020404114 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.066666667 106.682146367 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.5333333333 20.7667163134 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.93333333333 7.06120827912 56% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.9879759519 25% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 3.4128256513 176% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.254499876757 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0849965388924 0.084324248473 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652134031012 0.0667982634062 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.164269209754 0.151304729494 109% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0386531002167 0.056905535591 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.6 13.0946893788 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.65 12.4159519038 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.08 8.58950901804 106% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 78.4519038076 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.7795591182 93% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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