The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.Write at least 150 words.

Submitted by kissbiss on Fri, 10/11/2019 - 11:27

The graph illustrates the proportion of visitors to England who went to four different tourist
attractions in Brighton between 1980 and 2010.
Overall, it is clear that the percentage visiting the Pier and the Pavilion increased over the
period, while the proportion of visitors to the other attractions fell.
In 1980, only 10% of tourists to England went to Brighton Pier. Despite some minor
fluctuations, this figure rose from about 12% in 2000 to 22% in 2010. The percentage
visiting the Pavilion also increased,from 23% in 1980 to almost 50% in 1995.However, this
figure then declined, to 35% in 2000 and then to about 30% in 2010, slightly higher than the
Festival.
The most popular Brighton attraction in 1980 for visitors to England was the Festival.
Although 30% of these attended the Festival in 1980, by 2010 this percentage had fallen
slightly to 28%.In 1980, the figure for visitors to the Art Gallery was 21%. It rose to a
peakof 38%, but this then decreased dramatically to less than 10% in 2010. It was, therefore,
the least popular of the attractions at the end of the period.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ge visiting the Pavilion also increased,from 23% in 1980 to almost 50% in 1995.Howev...
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Suggestion: However
...,from 23% in 1980 to almost 50% in 1995.However, this figure then declined, to 35% in ...
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Message: Add a space between sentences
Suggestion: In
... percentage had fallen slightly to 28%.In 1980, the figure for visitors to the Ar...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, so, then, therefore, while

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 4.0 7.0 57% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 1.00243902439 0% => OK
Conjunction : 4.0 6.8 59% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 3.15609756098 63% => OK
Pronoun: 9.0 5.60731707317 161% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 41.0 33.7804878049 121% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 3.97073170732 76% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 933.0 965.302439024 97% => OK
No of words: 187.0 196.424390244 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98930481283 4.92477711251 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.69794460899 3.73543355544 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76261052798 2.65546596893 104% => OK
Unique words: 97.0 106.607317073 91% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.51871657754 0.547539520022 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 251.1 283.868780488 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.3 1.45097560976 90% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 1.53170731707 326% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 5.0 4.33902439024 115% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.07073170732 187% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.482926829268 207% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 3.36585365854 178% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 8.94146341463 101% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 22.4926829268 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8841193809 43.030603864 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.666666667 112.824112599 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7777777778 22.9334400587 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.55555555556 5.23603664747 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 13.0 3.83414634146 339% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 3.0 1.69756097561 177% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 3.70975609756 162% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 1.13902439024 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.09268292683 73% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.154329700447 0.215688989381 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0797894707502 0.103423049105 77% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0742021236395 0.0843802449381 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.066221340256 0.15604864568 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.063751262727 0.0819641961636 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 13.2329268293 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.56 61.2550243902 125% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.51609756098 48% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.3012195122 74% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.66 11.4140731707 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.58 8.06136585366 94% => OK
difficult_words: 35.0 40.7170731707 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 11.4329268293 92% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.9970731707 91% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.0658536585 72% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Maximum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 61.797752809 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 5.5 Out of 9
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