The passage gravitates towards the notion that by creating a team in the company for doing a particular task will bring multiple benefits by stating the advantages that comes along with the tactic. This idea is opposed by the professor by using an example of a survey of a company and providing the following reasons for the failure of the tactic.
Firstly, the passage says that by having multiple members working on a singular task would result in a quicker result. But the professor by referencing to the survey which was made in the last six months points out that the work was measured out to be slower than it should have normally taken. He states the reason behind it was that the team members conducted numerous meetings in order to come to a particular conclusion. Also the presence of multiple brains resulted into a chaos of different and non coherent ideas which made the process of coming to a conclusion that much slower.
The passage also says that the decision made by the group would be more creative because of being assigned as less risky by the protective shadow of the group. The professor talks against this by saying that the ideas were greatly puppet-ed by the influential people among the groups. These influential people used to ward off the ideas coming from other members of the team and used to sway the members into backing up the ideas brought forward by them. These influential people were also wrong a lot of times which could be verified by the outcome in the survey. Thus, such people restricted the creativity of the people who were not much influential but potentially had better ideas to do a particular task.
The extract says that forming a team would lead to a sense of achievement among all the members if they achieve something. The professor attacks this by saying that many free-riders made use of the success of the group without giving any substantial input that resulted in the outcome. The actual doers of the group were left dejected because of this unjust success awarded to the pedestrians of the team.
The professor used a survey from a company to prove that almost all the benefits of making a team to compete a task mentioned in the passage were phony and should not be used to strengthen the validity of the tactic.
- TOEFL T P O 18 Integrated Writing Task 52
- Professors are normally found in university classrooms, offices, and libraries doing research and lecturing to their students. More and more, however, they also appear as guests on television news programs, giving expert commentary on the latest events in 73
- In many organizations, perhaps the best way to approach certain new projects is to assemble a group of people into a team. Having a team of people attack a project offers several advantages. First of all, a group of people has a wider range of knowledge, 73
- TPO 18 Integrated 60
- The Reading:Altruism is a type of behavior in which an animal sacrifices its own interest for that of another animal or group of animals. Altruism is the opposite of selfishness; individuals performing altruistic acts gain nothing for themselves. Examples 80
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ing to a conclusion that much slower. The passage also says that the decision ...
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... better ideas to do a particular task. The extract says that forming a team wou...
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...ial input that resulted in the outcome. The actual doers of the group were left dej...
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...arded to the pedestrians of the team. The professor used a survey from a compa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, if, so, then, thus, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 10.4613686534 134% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 5.04856512141 139% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 7.30242825607 82% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 12.0772626932 132% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 30.3222958057 221% => Less preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 2.0 5.01324503311 40% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1892.0 1373.03311258 138% => OK
No of words: 399.0 270.72406181 147% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74185463659 5.08290768461 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.04702891845 110% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.48294412469 2.5805825403 96% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 145.348785872 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.471177944862 0.540411800872 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 582.3 419.366225166 139% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 8.0 8.23620309051 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 1.25165562914 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.51434878587 66% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 2.5761589404 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 13.0662251656 115% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 21.2450331126 122% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 29.9877011827 49.2860985944 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 126.133333333 110.228320801 114% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6 21.698381199 123% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.46666666667 7.06452816374 49% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 4.19205298013 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 4.33554083885 138% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.27373068433 94% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.159628002654 0.272083759551 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0571534406312 0.0996497079465 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0337785435941 0.0662205650399 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0827441603748 0.162205337803 51% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0552119456673 0.0443174109184 125% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.2 13.3589403974 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 53.8541721854 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.0289183223 112% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.51 12.2367328918 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.13 8.42419426049 97% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 63.6247240618 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.7273730684 126% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.498013245 118% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.2008830022 125% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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