Leadership by definition, is to guide or direct a set of people towards a common goal. Obedience or cooperation of the people that are being led is really important in a leadership role. Skills of teamwork and cooperation are the most important for a good leader rather than the skills of competing with others. Therefore, the best way to prepare young people for a leadership role in any field is to instill them a sense of cooperation rather than competition.
Building competitive environments around young people can surely help to improve their individual skills. If you consider the Advanced Level Examination in a country that selects the beneficiaries of free education by the results of the exam, it creates an immense competition amount the students. Based of this competition, many students will work ambitiously towards horn their individual skill with the purpose of surpassing his or her competition. This motivation, which promotes self-improvement and selfishness does not support the leadership skills.
In contrast, if there is a system that youth can work together towards a common goal, that will be better suited to improve leadership skills at a younger age. Winton Churchill mentions in one of his speeches that the most important feature of a good leader is to identify the skills and weaknesses of their peers and use them to achieve a common goal.
In conclusion, it is evident that the better way to breed leaders from the youth is to instill cooperation among them rather than competition, which will induce selfishness among them.
- Argument Topic: "The following is taken from a memo from the advertising director of the Super Screen Movie Production Company. "According to a recent report from our marketing department, during the past year, fewer people attended Super Screen-produced 50
- "The best way for a society to prepare its young people for leadership in government, industry, or other fields is by instilling in them a sense of cooperation, not competition." - Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or dis 50
- "Over the past year, our late-night news program has devoted increasingly more time to covering national news and less time to covering weather and local news. During the same time period, most of the complaints we received from viewers were concerned wit 77
- A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. 50
Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, really, still, therefore, in conclusion, in contrast
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 19.5258426966 56% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.4196629213 40% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 14.8657303371 47% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.3162921348 71% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 21.0 33.0505617978 64% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 58.6224719101 63% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 12.9106741573 116% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1314.0 2235.4752809 59% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 255.0 442.535393258 58% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.15294117647 5.05705443957 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.99608801488 4.55969084622 88% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99420432095 2.79657885939 107% => OK
Unique words: 134.0 215.323595506 62% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525490196078 0.4932671777 107% => OK
syllable_count: 398.7 704.065955056 57% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59117977528 101% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 6.24550561798 64% => OK
Article: 1.0 4.99550561798 20% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.10617977528 64% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.77640449438 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.38483146067 46% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 20.2370786517 54% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 23.0359550562 100% => OK
Sentence length SD: 37.200595392 60.3974514979 62% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.454545455 118.986275619 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1818181818 23.4991977007 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.09090909091 5.21951772744 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.97078651685 80% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 7.80617977528 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 10.2758426966 78% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 5.13820224719 19% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.83258426966 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.197629343693 0.243740707755 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0776734623123 0.0831039109588 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0855077423303 0.0758088955206 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.113797911797 0.150359130593 76% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0667897654532 0.0667264976115 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 14.1392134831 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 48.8420337079 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.92365168539 111% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 12.1743820225 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.89 12.1639044944 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.37 8.38706741573 100% => OK
difficult_words: 58.0 100.480337079 58% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 11.8971910112 76% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 11.2143820225 100% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.7820224719 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5/6 paragraphs with 3/4 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: reason 4. address both of the views presented for reason 4 (optional)
para 6: conclusion.
Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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