Some people believe that young people bring more profits to a company. Others say that older people actually bring more profits. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
people are employed for the value-maximization of a company. young people are thought to be ensuring healthy cash inflow using their physical stamina, but then again, experienced staff work strategically increase a firm's wealth. From my point of view, both of these groups have their unique ways of making corporate-profit.
Young personnel retain the capability to deliver hard-labor in workplace. In other words, many jobs require physical dedication to perform tasks, so physical-fitness is of prime importance. As employees between the age of 18-45 are historically physically strong, only they are the perfect-fit for such responsibilities. Almost 90% of workers of sales profession, for example, has the average age of 32 according to the International business Journal 2012. In response of that statistics, CEO of a large multinational said that as sales-force has to continuously roam among different places to secure increasing sales-trend, youth do better job in this arena. In business, areas, requiring high-stamina operators, shall be managed by young people to get splendid results.
Employees, who recently found themselves out of youth-league, play vital roles in bringing money in a company as well. Despite their comparatively low-stamina, these group of staff retain the experience to run operation. A business organization simultaneously require strategic plans to solve problems as well as ensure new opportunities. For instance, leading the marketing wing for a product requires a person's vision to plan and execute successful marketing of a commodity followed by high-volume sales. Talking about experience, a person gathers it throuout his life. In most cases, experienced people, unable to deliver hard-labor, act as key-persons to maximize profits.
To conclude, workforce comprises of both young people and old people. For the profit maximization of a firm, the hard-work of an young employee, as well as the experience of the aged employee are essential as the combination of these two groups complement each-other.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, if, so, then, well, as to, for example, for instance, talking about, as well as, in most cases, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 13.1623246493 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 7.85571142285 13% => OK
Conjunction : 3.0 10.4138276553 29% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 3.0 7.30460921844 41% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 41.998997996 112% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1749.0 1615.20841683 108% => OK
No of words: 310.0 315.596192385 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.64193548387 5.12529762239 110% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19604776685 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.41028773492 2.80592935109 122% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.664516129032 0.561755894193 118% => OK
syllable_count: 538.2 506.74238477 106% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 3.0 2.52805611222 119% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 0.809619238477 124% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 16.0721442886 106% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.2975951904 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.2450422963 49.4020404114 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.882352941 106.682146367 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2352941176 20.7667163134 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.76470588235 7.06120827912 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.01903807615 100% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 8.67935871743 115% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.9879759519 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 3.4128256513 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.14667798563 0.244688304435 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0480265902478 0.084324248473 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0585031665323 0.0667982634062 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101433373881 0.151304729494 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0608519867435 0.056905535591 107% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 13.0946893788 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 50.2224549098 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.43 12.4159519038 124% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 10.08 8.58950901804 117% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 78.4519038076 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 9.78957915832 77% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.1190380762 91% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 89.8876404494 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 8.0 Out of 9
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