Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization.
Why might this be the case?
What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?
All over the world, it could be widely said that there is a recent trend for people to choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organization. In this essay, I will discuss points about this theme in aspects of the reason why this might happen and the demerits of being self-employed.
To begin with, one of the great views which I would like to talk about is that people want to have a dream that they would become successful in their business in every era all over the world. These days, people can easily have access to various kinds of information, including business successes such as entrepreneurs, by using the internet. For instance, several famous companies such as Facebook, Google, and Amazon suddenly have appeared in the world and these companies can earn tremendous amounts of money. However, it is true that these companies started by one leader with a few people. Getting such information about their success stories from the start/beginning to present days, most of the people, who(,) I think(,) usually do not have special skills and talents with management to organize companies, plan to start their own business and then become self-employed.
Planning aside, it is easy for people to dream of their success in businesses like great venture companies, but it is unbelievably difficult to grasp their success. Furthermore, those who start their own business and become entrepreneurs have to consider colossal disadvantages. For example, the extreme overtime working would happen to them and they have to /experience risks/work at the cost of risks/ about their health. Unfortunately, one of my friends got a mental disorder due to overworking after he started the IT venture business. In addition to this, he had to loan huge amounts of money from the bank, which meant that he had to pay more money back due to its interests and went bankrupt in the end. There are few cases where they can get supports such as grants from governments.
In conclusion, this essay points out that these days a lot of people tend to choose to be self-employed, but they have to think about various kinds of disadvantages before starting their own businesses. As an old saying goes, “Think before you leap.”
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo. Did you mean 'the' or 'IT'?
Suggestion: the; IT
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Message: Did you mean 'ventures'?
Suggestion: ventures
... to overworking after he started the IT venture business. In addition to this, he had t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, then, for example, for instance, i think, in addition, in conclusion, such as, it is true, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 13.1623246493 76% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 7.85571142285 115% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 10.4138276553 106% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 7.30460921844 137% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 24.0651302605 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 41.998997996 155% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.3376753507 84% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1878.0 1615.20841683 116% => OK
No of words: 377.0 315.596192385 119% => OK
Chars per words: 4.98143236074 5.12529762239 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4064143971 4.20363070211 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.84708442444 2.80592935109 101% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 176.041082164 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.546419098143 0.561755894193 97% => OK
syllable_count: 561.6 506.74238477 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.60771543086 93% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 5.43587174349 166% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 16.0721442886 93% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.4845356674 49.4020404114 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 125.2 106.682146367 117% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.1333333333 20.7667163134 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.26666666667 7.06120827912 131% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.01903807615 40% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 8.67935871743 81% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.9879759519 100% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 3.4128256513 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253702157391 0.244688304435 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0891328041503 0.084324248473 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.144501976998 0.0667982634062 216% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.213915077394 0.151304729494 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.213849065075 0.056905535591 376% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 13.0946893788 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.56 50.2224549098 109% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.44779559118 42% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 11.3001002004 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.9 12.4159519038 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.27 8.58950901804 96% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 78.4519038076 103% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 9.78957915832 133% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 78.6516853933 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.0 Out of 9
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