Many animals are being hunted to the brink of extinction in order to fulfil the demands and greed of mankind for decorative purposes as well as for other reason such as traditional medicine. How can this issue be tackled?

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Many animals are being hunted to the brink of extinction in order to fulfil the demands and greed of mankind for decorative purposes as well as for other reason such as traditional medicine.

How can this issue be tackled?

One of the conspicuous trend of today's world is to see that there are many animals are killing by human which are on the verge of the extinction because people use the animals to produce fashionable products and conventional medicine. There are wide range of factors that accounts for why this is happening. In my opinion, the situations can be remedied provided some effective measures are taken.

There are myriad of solution for this soaring concerns. The most preponderant one is that nowadays the enormous amount of animals are killed in factory farming for fulfilling the needs of human being and they used them for making a leather jackets, wallet, shoes etc. Moreover, some animals are used by medical companies for making medicines. To restrict this, the government could introduce law to against people who poach animals for their luxury goods. For example, in South Africa, there was serious hunting issue in 2010 and the government has implemented such laws that if anyone is found guilty, he or she will be strictly punished as well as heavily penalized. As a result, 70% of the poaching animals by human being declined as compared to precious couple of decades.

Another prominent solution is that the government should start advertising campaigns to raise public awareness to protect the natural areas and wild animals. Besides, the government should declare forest areas as national parks and activate the rules and regulations to protect the fauna. For instance, according to Albert Einstein, if honey bees disappear from earth, human would be dead in four years. Approximately one third of our food depends on insect pollination majorly done by honey bees.

In view of the arguments outlined above, one can conclude that in this issue government is not only responsible for the protection of wild animals, masses also take a responsibility to save environment.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 241, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'jacket'?
Suggestion: jacket
...and they used them for making a leather jackets, wallet, shoes etc. Moreover, some anim...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, if, moreover, so, third, well, for example, for instance, in fact, as a result, as well as, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 13.1623246493 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 7.30460921844 110% => OK
Pronoun: 17.0 24.0651302605 71% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 41.998997996 90% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.3376753507 144% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1578.0 1615.20841683 98% => OK
No of words: 307.0 315.596192385 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.14006514658 5.12529762239 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.18585898806 4.20363070211 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70975708834 2.80592935109 97% => OK
Unique words: 188.0 176.041082164 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.612377850163 0.561755894193 109% => OK
syllable_count: 501.3 506.74238477 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 1.0 5.43587174349 18% => OK
Article: 4.0 2.52805611222 158% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.76152304609 105% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 16.0721442886 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.2975951904 103% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.4282160614 49.4020404114 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.714285714 106.682146367 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9285714286 20.7667163134 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.01903807615 20% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.67935871743 58% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.9879759519 150% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 3.4128256513 88% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.286990403154 0.244688304435 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0900881999446 0.084324248473 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0527175599881 0.0667982634062 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.153382891363 0.151304729494 101% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0868220068035 0.056905535591 153% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 13.0946893788 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 50.2224549098 100% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 11.3001002004 102% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.53 12.4159519038 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.26 8.58950901804 108% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 78.4519038076 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 9.78957915832 107% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.1190380762 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.7795591182 102% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 84.2696629213 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 7.5 Out of 9
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