The following appeared in an article written by Dr. Karp, an anthropologist. “Twenty years ago, Dr. Field, a noted anthropologist, visited the island of Tertia and concluded from his observations that children in Tertia were reared by an entire village rather than by their own biological parents. However, my recent interviews with children living in the group of islands that includes Tertia show that these children spend much more time talking about their biological parents than about other adults in the village. This research of mine proves that Dr. Field’s conclusion about Tertian village culture is invalid and thus that the observation-centered approach to studying cultures is invalid as well. The interview-centered method that my team of graduate students is currently using in Tertia will establish a much more accurate understanding of child-rearing traditions there and in other island cultures.”
The article has many gaps that need to be filled correctly. Some parts are vague, and Dr. Karp didn't explain exactly the arguments that he put forward. The observations done by Dr. Field is not clarified precisely, as Dr. Karp only mentions the conclusion of the research, and doesn't describe what processes does the research contain. Moreover, based on which perceptions and results does Dr. Field come into the conclusion that children in Tertia had been reared by an entire village, rather than by their biological parents. Furthermore, Dr. Karp does not discuss the gaps exist in the earlier research, and he simply refuses to accept its validity.
Moreover, Dr. Karp should state his research more accurately, since he only mentions that he recently interviewed some children living in the group of islands including Tertia. In his statement, he should mention exactly the number of children he chose for his sample if he used any sampling method. Besides, he talked about neither the population of children he chose nor the sample chosen by Dr. Field; thus, we cannot make a comparison between these two to decide which one is better.
In addition to not expressing the population, he doesn't explain about the interview. He is expected to say what the questions of the interview were, how these questions were asked, which parts of those islands were selected for interviews, etc. Researchers may only ask those children to talk about their parents, and they didn't ask any questions about other adults in the village, or they didn't ask sufficient questions.
Finally, it is not obvious from the conclusions of Dr. Karp what prominences his observations have over the other research done by Dr. Field. What principles did his research group have, which makes their outcomes about the child-rearing tradition to be more accurate. There need to be a proper bias or index based on which, we can make an appropriate decision about which observation is more valid than the other.
In conclusion, we cannot simply say that somebody's work is not able to be trusted. Instead, when we want to disprove research, enough data needs to be prepared so that the refutation would be trust-worthy.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 15 15
No. of Words: 369 350
No. of Characters: 1780 1500
No. of Different Words: 186 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.383 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.824 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.596 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 118 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 93 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 68 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 40 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 24.6 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 10.917 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.667 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.365 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.628 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.282 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ons the conclusion of the research, and doesnt describe what processes does the resear...
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Suggestion: doesn't
...on to not expressing the population, he doesnt explain about the interview. He is expe...
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Suggestion: didn't
...n to talk about their parents, and they didnt ask any questions about other adults in...
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Suggestion: didn't
...ut other adults in the village, or they didnt ask sufficient questions. Finally...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, finally, furthermore, if, may, moreover, so, thus, in addition, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 19.6327345309 87% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 12.9520958084 69% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 11.1786427146 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 13.6137724551 95% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 28.8173652695 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 55.5748502994 76% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 16.3942115768 49% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1843.0 2260.96107784 82% => OK
No of words: 364.0 441.139720559 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.06318681319 5.12650576532 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.36792674256 4.56307096286 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69156050408 2.78398813304 97% => OK
Unique words: 193.0 204.123752495 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.53021978022 0.468620217663 113% => OK
syllable_count: 541.8 705.55239521 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.59920159681 94% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 4.96107784431 161% => OK
Article: 2.0 8.76447105788 23% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.67365269461 299% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.22255489022 95% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 22.8473053892 96% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.1418870228 57.8364921388 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 115.1875 119.503703932 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.75 23.324526521 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.375 5.70786347227 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.25449101796 95% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 6.88822355289 29% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.67664670659 192% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204822392164 0.218282227539 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0710830077808 0.0743258471296 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0640711507357 0.0701772020484 91% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.106919548857 0.128457276422 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0795610094073 0.0628817314937 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 14.3799401198 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 48.3550499002 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 12.197005988 88% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 12.5979740519 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.32208582834 103% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 12.3882235529 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 11.1389221557 97% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 11.9071856287 92% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 75.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.5 Out of 6
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