The author of the reading tries to explain the term altruism with the help of examples. The author cites the examples of the human and meerkat to explain the characteristics of the term. However the lecturer does not agree with the examples presented forward by the author. He challenges the claim made by the author. The belief of the lecturer is explained below.
Firstly, the author presents that the individual acting as a sentinel in a group of the meerkats gains nothing, rather has to stay without food. However the lecturer does not accept this fact. According to him, the animal who acts like the sentinel is the one who eats first, gets satisfied and then only acts as a guard.
Secondly, the author tries to prove that the the organism that acts as the sentinel is most venerable to attack of the hawk. However, the lecturer does not agree with this example too. He presents the fact that those individual are the first one to detect the hawk. They also remain near the entrance of the borrow. So that when then locate the the hawk they are the one to escape or go to the safe side. As the other individual busy eating get the signal, they try to gather together which increases their chance of getting located and get attacked by the enemies.
Third, according to the author altruists donate their body organ to their family member or complete stranger and in return receive no any reward. However the lecturer refutes this claim with the statement that reward need not be monetary always. According to him, the donar need to take the consent of the recipient. The donar will also receive a lot of appreciation and this will in turn increase the self-esteem or the value of oneself. Thus the lecturer believes that the reward can be non monetary.
At the conclusion, the author tries to define the term and provide the example of each characteristics however the lecturer refutes such explanation citing some experiments.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, firstly, however, second, secondly, so, then, third, thus, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 10.4613686534 67% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 5.04856512141 99% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 7.30242825607 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 12.0772626932 91% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 22.412803532 103% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 30.3222958057 145% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 5.01324503311 80% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1611.0 1373.03311258 117% => OK
No of words: 337.0 270.72406181 124% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78041543027 5.08290768461 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.04702891845 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45848875983 2.5805825403 95% => OK
Unique words: 165.0 145.348785872 114% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489614243323 0.540411800872 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 496.8 419.366225166 118% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.55342163355 97% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 3.25607064018 123% => OK
Article: 10.0 8.23620309051 121% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 1.25165562914 160% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.51434878587 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 2.5761589404 155% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 13.0662251656 153% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 21.2450331126 75% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.1950251945 49.2860985944 80% => OK
Chars per sentence: 80.55 110.228320801 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.85 21.698381199 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.85 7.06452816374 54% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.09492273731 122% => OK
Language errors: 11.0 4.19205298013 262% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 4.33554083885 231% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 4.45695364238 112% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.27373068433 117% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0119423341041 0.272083759551 4% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.00463489483431 0.0996497079465 5% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0202030381967 0.0662205650399 31% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.00695134264163 0.162205337803 4% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0139026852833 0.0443174109184 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 13.3589403974 71% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 53.8541721854 118% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 5.55761589404 56% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 11.0289183223 76% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 12.2367328918 83% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.38 8.42419426049 88% => OK
difficult_words: 63.0 63.6247240618 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.7273730684 51% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.498013245 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 11.2008830022 71% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 3.33333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 30
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