As a student of university that has a long break between university semesters, the university
requires all students to do one of the following for one month during the break:
1)students must take a course on the subject that has no direct connection to their majors of
study.
2)students must volunteer to work in the city where the university is located or their hometowns
to improve some aspects of life of the city or their own town.
which one do you think is more beneficial for students in their university. Why?
In the present day and life, there are always long breaks between universities’ semesters. Students can use the time to do whatever they want; however, recently, the university requires students must to take the additional classes that indirect to their major or volunteer to do some works. Different people have different opinions, someone may think to take the extra courses is a good choice for students; however, as far as I am concerned, the best choice for students to choose is to participate in some volunteer activities.
First of all, both of the students and people who are helped can get advantages from it. To be specific, by going to a primary school to teach young children simple knowledge, help elder people to do some housework or clean the community will let students feel that they are a part of the society, simultaneously, the standard of life of people who are helped will become better than before. For instance, last summer break, I joined a public organization, and I would go to an old people’s home twice a week. Every time I would bring some snakes that made by myself or cloths to the elder and spend a whole day to accompany them. At the beginning of the time, I couldn’t see any smile on their face, I thought they were very lonely; however, since the increase of the time that I chat and help with them, they became happier than before. Moreover, after finished this work, I felt the meaning of responsibility.
Furthermore, by contrast to the additional courses, students can learn a lot by joining the volunteer work, and they won’t waste their time. For instance, my sister is a freshman at the university this year, and she joined the student council. During the start of the winter vacation, they present of their council decided to let all members tutor a nearby their campus’ primary school children some simple knowledge, thus, students would not waste their valuable time playing video games for a whole day. What’s more, I felt my sister has much more patience than before. She told me that, in the activity, her job was to teach young kids the basic technique of making sentences such as personification, metaphor, and simile. A lot of children had no concept of these points, so she just from the very beginning parts to teach and talk about these concepts over and over again.
All in all, students can get a lot of advantages by participating in volunteer activities; meanwhile, it will ease the life of people who need aid. Moreover, the more positive things that students do, our society will become more positive and colorful.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: must; have to
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...will become more positive and colorful.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, while, as to, for instance, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2179.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88565022422 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77899580276 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529147982063 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 674.1 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 66.7807961953 48.9658058833 136% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.176470588 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2352941176 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.29411764706 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.227268707715 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0762415712864 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0720049274657 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155567947842 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0873933755844 0.0645574589148 135% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.7 11.7677419355 125% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.38 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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