If you want to recommend a way to reduce living expenses for your friend, which of the following will you choose? Why? ۱٫ Find a roommate to share a room
۲٫ Do not buy the latest mobile phone, Buy new technological devices less frequently
۳٫ Buy cheap foods and cook home (do not often eat outside)
In the modern era, students have played a prominent role in all societies. Because it is of paramount importance, students have always sought many ways of enhancing the quality of their life. So, some researchers bring 3 theories for students until they can reduce their living expenses such as sharing their room by other students, avoiding to purchasing the latest version of mobile phone and other electronic devices, buying cheap food, and preparing meals at dwellers. I content that student can reduce their cost by selecting a proper roommate. In the following paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first important factor to be mentioned is that most of the home has a high rank of rent for students. To elaborate on my point, when students want to study in a different town, they must rent a proper house. In this situation, the money for renting house consider a huge part of their currency, but if they select a suitable roommate, they may reduce living expenses around half of the previous situation. For example, my brother was a student at Isfahan University of technology. He had to rent an apartment, and he paid a lot of money for it. When he decided to found a roommate, he could reduce his money, and save their money. I believe that students do not tend to exchange their mobile phone or lab top. They usually by something and use it for several years. So, they do not pay a lot of money for buying the last version of the electronic device. Furthermore, students and all people must consume organic, high quality and healthy food till they become a flourishing people. If they used poor quality of food, they must pay a lot of money for curing disses that get by using unhealthy food. So the student would not save money by eating poor quality food.
Another reason which deserves some words here is that choosing a roommate help student to save money by sharing their food. To shed more light on this matter, when pupils select a roommate, after some days they will become a close friend. In other words, they tend to improve their relationship with a roommate. So, in the first step, they start sharing food with each other. When they become a close friend, they will make a schedule for cooking food, and they start cooking food. As we know, when students prepare food at home, not only they can save their money but also they can consume healthy food.
All in all, considering the aforementioned reason leads us to the conclusion that the best ways for a student to reduce living expensive is choosing a suitable roommate. I believe that selecting a proper roommate not only can reduce the amount of money for renting a house but also can diminish consume money for food.
- Do you agree or disagree? It is impossible to always be completely honest with your friends. 70
- TPO 43 70
- If there s a way to improve yourself which one among the three choices you would take take more exercise eat healthy food reduce the amount of stress 83
- TPO 20 80
- TOEFL TPO 34 - Integrated Writing Task 60
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, may, so, well, for example, such as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2289.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 478.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.78870292887 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67581127817 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46165335181 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466527196653 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 692.1 618.680645161 112% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.0153282148 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.56 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.12 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.44 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142640910408 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454576873471 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.047240974891 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107452661946 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0382713235688 0.0645574589148 59% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.5 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.19 8.01818996416 90% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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