The increasingly rapid pace of life today causes more problems than it solves.
Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the statement and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, you should consider ways in which the statement might or might not hold true and explain how these considerations shape your position.
modernization has radically changed the structure of our daily lives. even though, the increase of the pace of the technological development of our world has resulted into an astronomical amount of benefits, one cannot deny the direct and indirect consequences and complications that modernization has caused, therefore, I partially agree with the author’s statement.
The exponential rate of technological development lead to many positive impacts on our world. For instance, breakthroughs in medicine allowed us to overcome and find cures to a cornucopia of ailments leading to a decrease in mortality rate. On an individual level, technology has made our lives incredibly convenient: advanced means of transportation such as cars and airplanes allow to travel to far places in a mere number of hours or less, where it would have taken days or weeks previously to travel that distance, cellular phones and the internet gave us the ability to connect to people all across the world instantaneously. such technological developments have provided us with the time and resources to tackle evermore complex issues. For example, we were able to built large laser interferometers, and in 2016, gravitational waves were discovered by LIGO, thus, further proving Einstein’s general theory of relativity, and just 3 years after, we obtained the first photo of a black hole. therefore, modernization bettered our lives and gave us the opportunity to solve exciting problems that were initially impossible and incomprehensible.
On the other hand, there is a dark side to modernization, as it can be incredibly destructive. For example, the exponential rate of technological development is accompanied by a rapid rate of energy consumption. this has led to two gargantuan problems, the first one is that non-renewable energy is quickly depleting, and the second is that our unsage use of energy has led to catastrophic climate change effects. The problem of climate change is becoming increasingly worse that we have inadvertently set a doomsday clock, if we do not solve this issue soon, our planet could be almost uninhabitable in a matter of decades.
another consequence to rapid modernization is that at times society cannot keep up or fully understand the consequences that a certain technology may have. For instance, the impact of the tragic explosion of the nuclear reactor at Chernobyl were of cataclysmic proportions, almost wiping all life forms on the continent of Europe and its complications are still last till today. The explosion was due to a gross neglect and the failure of the appropriate people to recognize the consequence of that neglect. another example is that of designer babies in which we will be able to manipulate the genes of embryos to produce babies that are more intelligent, healthier, and prettier. even though, this is a noble idea, however, there are ethical repercussions that need to be considered. As such technology could further increase the socioeconomic gap because wealthy families will be the ones who can afford this technology.
In conclusion, modernization has bettered our lives from several facets, however, if we turn a blind eye to the potential dangers it may cause or fail to understand their extent, then modernization will be the cause of our undoing.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, may, second, so, still, then, therefore, thus, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.5258426966 118% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 12.4196629213 105% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 14.8657303371 121% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.3162921348 133% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 33.0505617978 124% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 71.0 58.6224719101 121% => OK
Nominalization: 18.0 12.9106741573 139% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2808.0 2235.4752809 126% => OK
No of words: 526.0 442.535393258 119% => OK
Chars per words: 5.33840304183 5.05705443957 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.78901763229 4.55969084622 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.31480493128 2.79657885939 119% => OK
Unique words: 285.0 215.323595506 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.541825095057 0.4932671777 110% => OK
syllable_count: 905.4 704.065955056 129% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59117977528 107% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 6.24550561798 96% => OK
Article: 7.0 4.99550561798 140% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.10617977528 193% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.77640449438 225% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.38483146067 68% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.2370786517 94% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 23.0359550562 117% => OK
Sentence length SD: 79.0565911126 60.3974514979 131% => OK
Chars per sentence: 147.789473684 118.986275619 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6842105263 23.4991977007 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.10526315789 5.21951772744 136% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.97078651685 101% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 7.80617977528 167% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 10.2758426966 88% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 5.13820224719 117% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.83258426966 83% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0978896061694 0.243740707755 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0290347892872 0.0831039109588 35% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0278422667071 0.0758088955206 37% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.055370039345 0.150359130593 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0150452855049 0.0667264976115 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.6 14.1392134831 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 48.8420337079 73% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.92365168539 164% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 12.1743820225 123% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.99 12.1639044944 115% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.33 8.38706741573 111% => OK
difficult_words: 145.0 100.480337079 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 11.8971910112 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 11.2143820225 114% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 11.7820224719 119% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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It is not exactly right on the topic in the view of e-grader. Maybe there is a wrong essay topic.
Rates: 16.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 1.0 Out of 6
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