Some people think that children today are not as fit and healthy as in the past. Discuss the causes of this situation with relevant examples and give your opinion on possible solutions
It is believed by many that the progeny of current era is not as swift and strong as compared to those in past. There are myriad of reasons for this phenomenon to prevail such as technological advancements making the lives of children sedentary. However, there are ways to curb this issue which will be discussed in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, sedentary lifestyle is the foremost reason that causes major health issues among the kids, which happens due to ever-increasing technological advancements that facilitates people to accomplish tasks with less physical efforts. For example, in past, in free time children used to play sports which included lot of physical movement,such as cricket, but now these games are replaced by computer games, wherein they sit in front of the computer and spend hours playing senseless games. Moreover, unhealthy food is the second factor responsible for making the future generation unfit and obese. It is pretty evident that these days children are more fond of consuming pizzas and burgers than the home-cooked food, as they are exposed to such food not only on the every corner of the street but also at schools where the canteens offer packaged food and fast food. Additionally, even to flaunt the lavish life style, parents take their kids to restaurants or fast food joints every weekend for dinner.
However, there are plethora of ways to overcome such plight. Firstly, schools should take some corrective and strict steps and make sure that the food available at the canteens is healthy. Moreover, many extra-curricular activities must be included in the school curriculum, such as sports, which compels the kids to get indulged into it which ultilmately would help them in staying physically fit. Furthermore, parents should understand the criticality of the situation and educate and encourage children to eat heathy food and get involved in physically strained activities. For example, care-takers should take their children to parks and play grounds daily and play various interesting games with them. Also, it is the prime responsiblity of parents to cook healthy food in an interesting way which lure the kids to eat it.
To conclude, future generation these days are less active and more lethargic because of increasing amount of fast food consumption and almost none physical activity. However, this can be brought to an end by applying some strict rules by schools in the terms of food and amending curriculum, and measures taken by parents.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean: 'in the past'?
Suggestion: in the past
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Suggestion: in the past
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Message: Consider replacing "in an interesting way" with adverb for "interesting"; eg, "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
...siblity of parents to cook healthy food in an interesting way which lure the kids to eat it. To ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, firstly, furthermore, however, if, moreover, second, so, for example, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 13.1623246493 129% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 7.85571142285 89% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 10.4138276553 182% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 23.0 24.0651302605 96% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 41.998997996 131% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.3376753507 60% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2119.0 1615.20841683 131% => OK
No of words: 407.0 315.596192385 129% => OK
Chars per words: 5.20638820639 5.12529762239 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49157444576 4.20363070211 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.78785015639 2.80592935109 99% => OK
Unique words: 224.0 176.041082164 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.550368550369 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 646.2 506.74238477 128% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 5.43587174349 74% => OK
Article: 0.0 2.52805611222 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 2.10420841683 48% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 0.809619238477 247% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.76152304609 84% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 16.0721442886 100% => OK
Sentence length: 25.0 20.2975951904 123% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 58.124831989 49.4020404114 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 132.4375 106.682146367 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.4375 20.7667163134 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.875 7.06120827912 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.01903807615 80% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 8.67935871743 104% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 3.4128256513 147% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109597635219 0.244688304435 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0358350184832 0.084324248473 42% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0279039777334 0.0667982634062 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0697574139402 0.151304729494 46% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.024071014062 0.056905535591 42% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.8 13.0946893788 121% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 50.2224549098 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 11.3001002004 115% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 12.4159519038 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.64 8.58950901804 101% => OK
difficult_words: 97.0 78.4519038076 124% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 9.78957915832 123% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.1190380762 119% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.7795591182 111% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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