older freinds vs. new freinds
The time one spends with other people is one the most crucial periods in the life; as communicating leads one to learn lots of diverse experiences and shape the ensuing life; hence, one of the highly controversial issues among many individuals is to stay with older friends vs. making new friends. As far as I am concerned, in a state of ambivalence, I might lean to be with older friends. Ostensibly, some people believe that we should find new friends, however, many reasons can declare the higher beneficiary of keeping older friends. I will interpret my response in the following essay.
First, strong relationships with others are an advantage for individuals because strong bonds include valuable interactions. Doubtlessly, such interactions help to broaden the mind and learn divergent believes. Consequently, this will enrich one’s personality. To build strong bonds one needs to learn many aspects of other person; aspects such as the behaviour, family relationships, favourites, etc. which can not be learned in a brief time. Granted all this little information contributes to the strength of a relation, but short relation cannot provide them. As an illustrative example, some years ago, during my high school time at the Beheshty high school in Iran, there was a girl, called Sara, Sara had allergy to mango. Sara’s new friend held a party for her birthday, serving a mango cake, not knowing about the possible-allergic reaction. In the beginning, everyone thought this would be fantastic party but this was not true. Unfortunately, Sara had to go to hospital upon eating the cake, and it was her worst birthday. The girl was not angry, given the explanation, but the bond between them did not become strong. As one can see, to make strong relations, one needs much information about friends and information obtainment associate with the time.
Second, with a longer time to spend with a person, you share more memories. One cannot start talking about the shared childhood memories upon seeing a new person. Most of the time we talk about our memories with our friends; without such kind of memories, it would be hard to find a topic to make more memories. For example, some years ago, my sister invited her friend home to spend a night with her. That night they slept sooner than us, as they had nothing to talk about. So, to improve the relationship with someone one needs to share memories and therefore spend much time with that person.
Third, older friends tend to be more reliable. When we have problems, we prefer to consult with somebody known for a long time. This happens because we can rely on their honesty and help. For instance, when I have some academic problem and I need someone to consult, the first person I am thinking of is my oldest friend. Therefore, we need reliable friends, and most of the times they are our oldest friends.
I am of the conviction that the older friend is better; because we make strong bonds, have many shared memories and rely on them the most, but it would not harm to make new friends. So, I mainly suggest keeping our old friends, while making new friends occasionally. The effect of my solution would be that we have the benefits of our older companions while gaining new experience, but if not possible, for the aforementioned reasons, I conclude that a longer relationship, with an older friend, is a better choice.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 202, Rule ID: BELIEVE_BELIEF[1]
Message: Did you mean 'beliefs' (noun) instead of believes (verb)?
Suggestion: beliefs
...to broaden the mind and learn divergent believes. Consequently, this will enrich one&apo...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, however, if, second, so, therefore, third, while, for example, for instance, kind of, such as, talking about
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 68.0 52.1666666667 130% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2827.0 1977.66487455 143% => OK
No of words: 575.0 407.700716846 141% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91652173913 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.89685180668 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74736154576 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 280.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.486956521739 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 853.2 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 31.0 20.6003584229 150% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.1636671814 48.9658058833 113% => OK
Chars per sentence: 91.1935483871 100.406767564 91% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.5483870968 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.54838709677 5.45110844103 83% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 23.0 11.8709677419 194% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0823137995613 0.236089414692 35% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0253444783527 0.076458572812 33% => Sentence topic similarity is low.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394243013007 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0601786358313 0.150856017488 40% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0542846915545 0.0645574589148 84% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.26 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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