It is said that the amount of violence on the TV programs has negative effect on our social development and therefore should be reduced.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
<p class="MsoNormal">Many claims have been made against the violence elements on
TV shows in recent years. It is believed to have brought negative impacts to
the society as a whole, and the majority stated that this should be alleviated.
I concur with the idea.<o:p></o:p></p>
<p class="MsoNormal">To begin with, youngsters especially teenagers are easily
effected by the things broadcasted by the media. It is scientific proved that young
children enjoy imitating the images that they have seen. If teenagers try to
smoke or drink regarding the acts of certain movie characters, this will turn
into bad habits. These, however, will eventually be nurtured day by day, and the
insidious effects of such is considerable. For example, many kids try to smoke
at an early age then later on, they addict to drugs.<o:p></o:p></p>
<p class="MsoNormal">Furthermore, nowadays, most of the TV programs are criminal
shows. Several famous series of films show on TV during prime time like “murder
in the first” or “how to get away with murder” contains unsuitable content for
youngster such as killing scenes or murdering method. Since no controlling
method to prevent children from watching such shows is applied, children may
observe and follow unconsciously. By virtue of that, there has been a incline
in number of illegal act on the worldwide scale.<o:p></o:p></p>
<p class="MsoNormal">Summing up, for all the reasons mentioned above, I deem that
shows, programs or films which include criminal or violence scenes should not
be shown too much on the screen. Instead, governments shall take the
responsibility in controlling the amount of these elements on media.<o:p></o:p></p>
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, however, if, may, regarding, so, then, for example, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 13.1623246493 84% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 7.85571142285 76% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 10.4138276553 77% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 7.30460921844 82% => OK
Pronoun: 14.0 24.0651302605 58% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 41.998997996 100% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.3376753507 24% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1554.0 1615.20841683 96% => OK
No of words: 260.0 315.596192385 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.97692307692 5.12529762239 117% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.01553427287 4.20363070211 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 4.9126391755 2.80592935109 175% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 176.041082164 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.669230769231 0.561755894193 119% => OK
syllable_count: 424.8 506.74238477 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.60771543086 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 5.43587174349 110% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 0.809619238477 371% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.76152304609 126% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 16.0721442886 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.2975951904 113% => OK
Sentence length SD: 65.6133175355 49.4020404114 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 141.272727273 106.682146367 132% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.6363636364 20.7667163134 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.54545454545 7.06120827912 121% => OK
Paragraphs: 22.0 4.38176352705 502% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 12.0 5.01903807615 239% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.67935871743 35% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.9879759519 176% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 3.4128256513 29% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.117177871025 0.244688304435 48% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0471867912305 0.084324248473 56% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0352410361998 0.0667982634062 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0353488634087 0.151304729494 23% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0351101108831 0.056905535591 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.6 13.0946893788 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 50.2224549098 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.44779559118 118% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 11.3001002004 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 17.7 12.4159519038 143% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.45 8.58950901804 110% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 78.4519038076 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 9.78957915832 87% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.1190380762 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.7795591182 83% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Maximum five paragraphs wanted.
Rates: 67.4157303371 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.0 Out of 9
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