The following letter is from a group of Linford College alumni to the chair of the art
department at the college.
“In a recent survey of college graduates, 90 percent agreed that participating in an
internship increased their chances of finding a job after graduation, but last year, only 40
percent of Linford’s graduating art students had completed an internship. Skyway Designs,
located in nearby Linford City, is the perfect company for students to intern with for a
number of reasons: They offer internships in all of their departments, so every student is
sure to find work that they are interested in. Additionally, their internships offer flexible
working hours. Finally, Skyway Designs is known for being one of the best in the design
business, as over 80 percent of businesses in Linford City have used the services of
Skyway Designs for their design needs. Given the vital role that work experience plays in
a student’s success after graduation, we recommend that our art department require all art
students to complete an internship with Skyway Designs before graduation.”
Write a response in which you discuss what questions would need to be answered in order
to decide whether the recommendation and the argument on which it is based are
reasonable. Be sure to explain how the answers to these questions would help to evaluate
the recommendation.
While it may be true that the art students should finish an internship with Skyway Designs prior to leaving college, the argument does not make a resounding case for formulation of a rule that require all students to undertake such internship. The argument fails to answer many pivotal questions, and requiring all students to complete such internships might not, therefore, increase their chances of landing a job.
First of all, although the mentioned survery showed that most of the surveyed college graduates agreed that taking an internship increased their chances of acquiring a job, the argument fails to answer whether participations in internships really increase the employed percentages of college graduates. Statistics are needed to draw this conclusion, rather than simply citing how people feel about this issue. It is likely that people think that getting interships increases the possibilities of getting a job, but the data does not accord with that. In this way, it is unreasonable for the art college to force all the art students to get internship without properly answering this question.
Furthermore, the argument does not explain what the attitudes of Skyway Designs to accept art students from this college as interns are. It is possible that Skyway Designs is indeed a great company; however, it might not be willing to accept all the students from this college as interns. Therefore, it is unwise to directly requiring all students to get an internship with this company with considering the attitude of this company.
In conclusion, although the recommendation seems logical at first glance, the argument fails to answer several important questions. Therefore, requiring all art students to have an internship with Skyway Designs prior to graduation might not lead to increased employed proportions of college graduates of t.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.5 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 11 15
No. of Words: 293 350
No. of Characters: 1531 1500
No. of Different Words: 137 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.137 4.7
Average Word Length: 5.225 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.813 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 127 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 101 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 69 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 43 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 26.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 8.116 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.818 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.428 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.633 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.115 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 4 5
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, however, may, really, so, therefore, while, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 19.6327345309 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 12.9520958084 39% => OK
Conjunction : 2.0 11.1786427146 18% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 8.0 13.6137724551 59% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 28.8173652695 83% => OK
Preposition: 41.0 55.5748502994 74% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 16.3942115768 55% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1579.0 2260.96107784 70% => OK
No of words: 293.0 441.139720559 66% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.38907849829 5.12650576532 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.56307096286 91% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.86885192379 2.78398813304 103% => OK
Unique words: 144.0 204.123752495 71% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.491467576792 0.468620217663 105% => OK
syllable_count: 467.1 705.55239521 66% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 4.96107784431 101% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.67365269461 119% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.22255489022 47% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 11.0 19.7664670659 56% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 22.8473053892 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.1447402114 57.8364921388 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 143.545454545 119.503703932 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.6363636364 23.324526521 114% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.72727272727 5.70786347227 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 5.15768463074 78% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 0.0 5.25449101796 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 8.20758483034 49% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 6.88822355289 44% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.67664670659 86% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135831851446 0.218282227539 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0617314809321 0.0743258471296 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0652478264414 0.0701772020484 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0891907999897 0.128457276422 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455063206856 0.0628817314937 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.3 14.3799401198 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 48.3550499002 93% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 7.1628742515 43% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 12.197005988 110% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.28 12.5979740519 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.32208582834 102% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 98.500998004 67% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 12.3882235529 141% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 11.1389221557 111% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 11.9071856287 151% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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