The graph below shows the changes in food consumption by Chinese people between 1985 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph represents the variation of food intake of Chinese population in a 25 year period. It can be clearly seen that fish and meat consumption follows an almost the same trend, while salt intake plummeted steadily in between 1985 and 2010.

Let us take a look at the meat and fish consumption. In 1985 to 1990, both slowly inclined. The first one started from 100 and rose slightly to 150 grams per person per week, while the latter on the same period of time shot up from 600 to 700 grams per person perweek. From 1995 to 2000, meat consumption maintained its acceleration to 180 before i...

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while the fish intake in 1990 to 1995, dramatically dropped back to 600
while the fish intake dramatically dropped back to 600 in 1990 to 1995

Sentence: The first one started from 100 and rose slightly to 150 grams per person per week, while the latter on the same period of time shot up from 600 to 700 grams per person perweek.
Error: perweek Suggestion: No alternate word

Sentence: In 1985 to 2010, it started from 500 and continously slumped and it reached its lowest peak of 200 in year 2010.
Error: continously Suggestion: continuously

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