A recently issued twenty-year study on headaches suffered by the residents of Mentia investigated the possible therapeutic effect of consuming salicylates. Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, a medicine used to treat headaches. Although many foods are naturally rich in salicylates, food-processing companies also add salicylates to foods as preservatives. The twenty-year study found a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. At the time when the study concluded, food-processing companies had just discovered that salicylates can also be used as flavor additives for foods, and, as a result, many companies plan to do so. Based on these study results, some health experts predict that residents of Mentia will suffer even fewer headaches in the future.
The argument is about the health effect of Salicylates on headache and the usage of it as flavor additives for foods. It is said that Salicylates are members of the same chemical family as aspirin, and it has a medical treatment. In one research in Mentia, the researcher has found that there are relationships between the rise in the commercial use of Salicylates and a steady decline in the headache of participants. Therefore, companies tend to use it as preservatives on foods. This argument has some weaknesses and unanswered questions that I will discuss.
In this argument, the effect of Salicylate has been only checked in one city with an unclear number of people. There are no valid statistical figures for the number of people who participated in this research. The writer has failed to provide statistical figures which show that the effect of Salicylates on headache.
In addition to this, in this argument, only the benefits of Salicylates have been brought. How the researchers can ensure that the disadvantages of Salicylates do not outweigh the advantages? The overuse of Salicylates may harm the other parts of the body. In this argument, only headache treatment of Salicylates has been considered.
It is said that there is a correlation between the rise in the commercial use of Salicylates and a steady decline in the average number of headaches reported by study participants. Therefore, companies have decided to use them as flavor additives for foods. There no evidence about the dose of Salicylates in foods. How much of them on food does not have any problem for people’s body? How do the researchers know that Salicylates have the same positive effect on people?
Also, there is no ideas or comments of doctors about the effect of Salicylates on headache. Do doctors confirm the effect of Salicylates? There is no evidence about the confirmation of doctors about Salicylates. So, for the use of Salicylates the health center should have enough supervision.
The writer in order to strengthen his argument has to answer all the questions mentioned above.
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Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 3.0 out of 6
Category: Satisfactory Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 22 15
No. of Words: 344 350
No. of Characters: 1700 1500
No. of Different Words: 142 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.307 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.942 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.936 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 122 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 94 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 72 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 15.636 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 5.936 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.273 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.357 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.584 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.125 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 6 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 9, column 7, Rule ID: THERE_S_MANY[4]
Message: Did you mean 'there are no ideas'?
Suggestion: there are no ideas
...same positive effect on people? Also, there is no ideas or comments of doctors about the effect...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, may, so, then, therefore, as to, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 19.6327345309 61% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 11.1786427146 54% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 13.6137724551 66% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 28.8173652695 76% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 55.5748502994 104% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 16.3942115768 79% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1755.0 2260.96107784 78% => OK
No of words: 344.0 441.139720559 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10174418605 5.12650576532 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.30665032142 4.56307096286 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.05004759957 2.78398813304 110% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 204.123752495 72% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.424418604651 0.468620217663 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 579.6 705.55239521 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.59920159681 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 4.96107784431 60% => OK
Article: 6.0 8.76447105788 68% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 2.70958083832 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.67365269461 60% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 19.7664670659 111% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 22.8473053892 66% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.844106632 57.8364921388 59% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 79.7727272727 119.503703932 67% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.6363636364 23.324526521 67% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.27272727273 5.70786347227 40% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 6.0 5.15768463074 116% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.25449101796 19% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 3.0 8.20758483034 37% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 13.0 6.88822355289 189% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.67664670659 128% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.186829949956 0.218282227539 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0639876547924 0.0743258471296 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0569258751677 0.0701772020484 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0962650802541 0.128457276422 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0658800337435 0.0628817314937 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 14.3799401198 72% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 47.79 48.3550499002 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 12.197005988 84% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.0 12.5979740519 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.78 8.32208582834 93% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 98.500998004 75% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 12.3882235529 73% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 11.1389221557 72% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 11.9071856287 76% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 50.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 3.0 Out of 6
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