The government is going to give some money either to support the arts or to protect the environment. Which do you think the government should choose? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
economic problems caused governments to haven't enough money to support all the projects. If the government has to decide the financial support of between art and environment protection, some people prefer the budget given to support the art, but the other ones are in the belief that protection of the environment is more important. I concur with the latter group's opinion. The reasons to substation my viewpoint are elaborated in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, environment protection problems are more urgency than art problems. If the government doesn't attend to the environment, it goes destroyed. It is no secret to anyone that anything in this word is not just for us and we should protect our environment for the future. Furthermore, environment problems involve all the society members, but just part of society members are dealing with art. For instance, air pollution has badly affected all the big cities, but maybe a quarter of the population annoyed because of the lack of a good theater.
Secondly, the government can manage art programs using big companies that can invest in an art project, but it is so hard to convince companies investing in environmental protection programs. There are many companies seeking talents in art to investment in their art. These companies are pretty sure their money give back them very soon and these investments have a lot of benefit for them. For example, there are music companies that support singers to being a celebrity and after that, they can make money in many ways such as sailing concert tickets.
Considering all the reasons and points mentioned above, one could conclude that supporting the environmental protection programs is more essential than supporting the art programs. Individuals and art companies can invest in art programs or young artists and having their benefits.
- TOEFL T P O 49 - Integrated Writing Task 3
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- In general, people are living longer now. Discuss the causes of this phenomenon. Use specific reasons and details to develop your essay. 76
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- TOEFL T P O 49 - Integrated Writing Task 3
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, may, second, secondly, so, as to, for example, for instance, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 23.0 43.0788530466 53% => OK
Preposition: 34.0 52.1666666667 65% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1566.0 1977.66487455 79% => OK
No of words: 300.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.22 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.16179145029 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83920176576 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 167.0 212.727598566 79% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.556666666667 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 476.1 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 52.671560954 48.9658058833 108% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.4 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.0 5.45110844103 128% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.260034229655 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0859037092933 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0694727200424 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.167616905682 0.150856017488 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0610895068668 0.0645574589148 95% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.52 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 74.0 86.8835125448 85% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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