Some people believe that it necessary to focus on academics, while other believe it is more important to focus on physical education.
Discuss both views , give your opinion
Some argue that schools should concentrate on academics, while others believe that it is necessary for students to learn physical education. While I accept that academics is important, I would argue that both physical and academic education should be a requirement for all students.
On the first hand, academics play an integral role in the career options in the future, for example, some reports have shown that those who have a good college degree are more likely to find a well-paid job and therefore it beneficial for students to have good marks, high grades during their academic life to gain a better opportunity to seek for their dream jobs. Next it uses academic marks to test if students are eligible to graduate, so instead of concentrating much on unnecessary outdoor physical activities, students should improve academic performance, besides, a wide range of knowledge mostly come from academics which play a complementary part to the potential jobs in the future.
At the other hand, physical education is another fundamental aspect of education. Physical education provides students a healthy and sociable environment that can help young students from elementary to secondary highschool to socialize. Apart from that, academics is one of the top priority for students to graduate so staying wholesome by physical activities may boost academic performance and also improve a student's confidence to deal with difficulties they may encounter during schooltime. In addition, physical activities can reduce a great amount stress results from the test, score and grade in school, for instance, in Korea the number of student who kill themselves has surged for recent years. Compared to the US, by adding the physical education program to every education system, students find it easy to deal with academic hardships. Finally, physical education can raise students' awareness of a healthy lifestyle which is essential to their studying.
In general, it seems evident that both physical and academic education has its own unique effect. It should take however academic and physical schooling to be the main subject for every student
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, first, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, well, while, apart from, for example, for instance, in addition, in general
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 13.1623246493 68% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 7.85571142285 127% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 10.4138276553 67% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 7.30460921844 164% => OK
Pronoun: 24.0 24.0651302605 100% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 41.998997996 105% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.3376753507 192% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1816.0 1615.20841683 112% => OK
No of words: 338.0 315.596192385 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.37278106509 5.12529762239 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28774723029 4.20363070211 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81347724601 2.80592935109 100% => OK
Unique words: 187.0 176.041082164 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55325443787 0.561755894193 98% => OK
syllable_count: 581.4 506.74238477 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.60771543086 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 5.43587174349 55% => OK
Article: 1.0 2.52805611222 40% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 2.10420841683 95% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 0.809619238477 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.76152304609 147% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 16.0721442886 75% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.2975951904 138% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.1945439288 49.4020404114 181% => OK
Chars per sentence: 151.333333333 106.682146367 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.1666666667 20.7667163134 136% => OK
Discourse Markers: 12.25 7.06120827912 173% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.38176352705 91% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.01903807615 60% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 8.67935871743 92% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.9879759519 50% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 3.4128256513 59% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.11324371484 0.244688304435 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0641215930356 0.084324248473 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0820528147268 0.0667982634062 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0972762777901 0.151304729494 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0832385569715 0.056905535591 146% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 13.0946893788 137% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 34.6 50.2224549098 69% => OK
smog_index: 13.0 7.44779559118 175% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 11.3001002004 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.16 12.4159519038 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.9 8.58950901804 104% => OK
difficult_words: 83.0 78.4519038076 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 20.0 9.78957915832 204% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.1190380762 130% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.7795591182 121% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.0337078652 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 6.5 Out of 9
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